Describe an interesting video you watched

Band 6

I would like to talk about an interesting video that I seeTense slip: should be “saw” last month. It was a short documentary, about twelve minutes, about the stilt fishermen on the south coast of Sri Lanka, near Galle. I watched it on my laptop at home in Colombo on a rainy Sunday afternoon. My cousin Shehan sendTense slip: should be “sent” me the link because he knew that I was, erHesitation filler, always interested in our local culture. I watched it because I had seen those men on postcards and photos many times, but I never knew how they really live. In the video, a man called Sunil explains that he sits on a wooden pole in the sea for many hours and waits for small fish, and his father and grandfather doTense slip: should be “did” the same. The camera also followed him when he climbed onto the pole before the sunrise and kept his balance with one hand, which looked impossible to me. The pictures of the sunrise and the water were very beautifulBasic phrase; limits Lexical Resource, and I watched without touching my phone. Sunil also says that less young menCountable noun error: should be “fewer young men” want to learn this work because it is difficult and uncertain. About my feelings, I feel proud because it is a nice traditionVague phrase; limits Lexical Resource of my country, but I also feel a little sad because it may disappear one day. After the video I showTense slip: should be “showed” it to my parents, and we talked about it all evening. You knowFiller used as a hesitation marker, now I look at fishermen in a different way.

Band 7

I’d like to talk about an interesting video I watched last month. It was a short documentary, about twelve minutes long, on the stilt fishermen of the south coast of Sri Lanka, near Galle. I watched it on my laptop at home in Colombo on a rainy Sunday afternoon. My cousin Shehan had sent me the link because he knew I’m always curious about our local culture. I decided to watch it because I’d seen those men on postcards and photos many times, but I’d never understood how they actually live. In the video, a man called Sunil explains that he sits on a wooden pole in the sea for hours, waiting for small fish, and that his father and grandfather did exactly the same. The camera also followed him as he climbed onto the pole before dawn and balanced there with one hand, which looked almost impossible to me. The footage of the sunrise over the water was breathtakingPrecise, natural description of the images, and I didn’t touchedForm error: should be “didn’t touch” my phone once. Sunil also says that fewer young men want to learn this work because it’s difficult and uncertain. As for how I feel, I’m proud of it as part of our heritage, but at the same time a little sadContrast marker keeps the feeling balanced, because it may disappear. Afterwards I showed it to my parents and we talked about it all evening. It has honestly changed the way I look atNatural phrase showing a change of view the fishermen in the coastPreposition error: should be “on the coast”.

Band 8

I’d like to talk about an interesting video I watched last month: a short documentary, about twelve minutes long, on the stilt fishermen of the south coast of Sri Lanka, near Galle. I watched it on my laptop at home in Colombo on a rainy Sunday afternoon. My cousin Shehan had sent me the link because he knew I’m always curious about our local culture. I decided to watch it because I’d seen those men on postcards and photos many times, but I’d never understood how they actually live. In the video, a man called Sunil explains that he sits on a wooden pole in the sea for hours, waiting for small fish, and that his father and grandfather did exactly the same. The camera also followed him as he climbed onto the pole before dawn and balanced there with one hand, which looked almost impossible to me. The footage of the sunrise over the water was breathtaking, and I was glued to the screenIdiomatic phrase for total attention from start to finish. Sunil also says that fewer young men want to learn this work because it’s difficult and uncertain. As for how I feel, I’m proud of it as part of our heritage, yet I can’t help feeling a little sad that it may disappearConcessive “yet” and “can’t help” used accurately. Afterwards I showed it to my parents and we talked about it all evening. HonestlyShort discourse marker that signals a sincere comment, it has left a lasting impression on mePrecise, natural collocation, and I now look at those fishermen with far more respect.