Describe a person you know who has healthy habits

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I would like to talk about my friend Dilshan, who lives in Kandy in Sri Lanka. We meetTense slip: should be “met” about three years ago at a weekend English class, because we sat at the same table and he always helpTense slip: should be “helped” me with the pronunciation. Now we are good friends. He works as a nurse in the city hospital, so his days are very long, but he never skipSubject-verb agreement error: should be “never skips” his routine. He has a very healthy lifestyle, and I think it is the bestBasic superlative; limits Lexical Resource lifestyle I know. Every morning he gets up at five, you knowFiller phrase used as a hesitation marker, and he runs round the lake near his house for forty minutes. After that he makeSubject-verb agreement error: should be “makes” breakfast at home, usually fruit and eggs, because he does not like food from outsideImprecise word choice; “restaurants” or “takeaways” would be clearer. He drinks a lot of water and he do notAuxiliary error: should be “does not” drink sugary drinks at all. On Sundays he cooks lunch for his parents and they eat together, with no television on, so it is a very nice timeBasic vocabulary; limits Lexical Resource. In the evening he erNatural hesitation marker, minor filler goes to bed at ten, so he is never tired. I feel respect for him, and also a little envy, because I can notSpelling and form error: should be “cannot” or “can’t” wake up so early. But he inspired me, and now I try to walk after dinner every day. Last month I joined him for a run, and I was very slow, but he waited for me and he did not laugh at me, so I felt happy. I think it is a good thingBasic vocabulary; limits Lexical Resource to have a friend like him.

Band 7

I’d like to talk about my friend Dilshan, who lives in Kandy in Sri Lanka. We met about three years ago at a weekend English class, because we sat at the same table and he always helped me with my pronunciation. Now we’re good friends. He works as a nurse at the city hospital, so his days are long, but he never skips his routine. He has one of the healthiest lifestyles of anyone I know. Every morning he gets up at five and runs round the lake near his house for forty minutes. After that he makes breakfast at home, usually fruit and eggs, as he don’tAuxiliary error: should be “doesn’t” like eating out. He drinks plenty of water and cuts out sugary drinks altogetherPrecise phrasal verb with a natural adverb. On Sundays he cooks lunch for his parents and they eat together with the television off, which he says is good for the whole family. In the evening he’s in bed by ten, so he’s rarely tiredAccurate adverb of frequency during the day. I feel respect for him, and also a little envy, since I can’t seem to get up that earlyNatural use of “can’t seem to” with a reason clause. But he’s inspired me, and now I try to walk after dinner every day. Last month I joined him for a run and was painfully slow, but he waited for me and never once made me feel embarrassed. It’s encouragingMore precise than a general positive adjective to have a friend who leads by example, if you see what I meanNatural check-in phrase with a conversational tone rather than telling me what to do.

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I’d like to talk about my friend Dilshan, who lives in Kandy in Sri Lanka. We met about three years ago at a weekend English class, because we sat at the same table and he always helped me with my pronunciation. Now we’re good friends. He’s a nurse at the city hospital, so his days are long, yet he never lets his routine slip. He has one of the healthiest lifestyles of anyone I know. He’s a real early riserIdiomatic noun phrase used naturally: he gets up at five and runs round the lake near his house for forty minutes. After that he makes breakfast at home, usually fruit and eggs, since he’d rather not eat out. He drinks plenty of water and has cut out sugary drinks altogetherPrecise phrasal verb with a natural adverb. On Sundays he cooks lunch for his parents, and they eat together with the television off, which he says is as good for the mind as for the body. In the evening he’s in bed by ten, which is why he is rarely tired during the dayRelative clause linking cause and effect. I feel respect for him, and a little envy too, since I can’t seem to get up that early. That said,Discourse marker introducing a contrast he’s inspired me to start walking after dinner every day. Last month I joined him for a run and was painfully slow, but he stayed beside me the whole way and never once made me feel self-conscious. It’s reassuringPrecise adjective for a quiet emotional effect to have a friend who leads by example rather than lecturing me, and it has made me realise that healthy habits are built one small step at a time.