Describe a story or book with animals in it

Band 6

I would like to talk about a book called Animal Farm, which was written by George Orwell. I have readTense error: should be “read”, because the time is finished it two years ago in Tbilisi, because my English teacher said usVerb pattern error: should be “told us” or “asked us” to read it for our literature class. The story is about a farm where the animals decidesSubject-verb agreement error: should be “decide” to send away the farmer and run the farm by themselves. There are pigs, horses, sheep and dogs in it. The sheep say the same short sentences all the time, and the dogs help the pigs to keep control. I liked this because the animals have different characters, like real people. At the beginning everything is very goodBasic phrase; limits Lexical Resource, but slowly the pigs become the new leaders and they start to act like the farmer. The horse Boxer works very hard for everybody, and the pigs do not treat him fairAdjective or adverb error: should be “fairly” at the end. ErNatural hesitation marker, minor filler, I almost cried when I read this part. In my opinion it is a very good book because it looks like a simple story for children, but it is really about people who have power and how they can change. It is also short, so it was more easyComparative error: should be “easier” than I expected. You knowFiller phrase used as a hesitation marker, I think it is a story that everybody should read, young people and also adults, because the message is still very importantBasic phrase; limits Lexical Resource today. After I finished it, my friends and I had a long discussion in the class, and the teacher was very pleased.

Band 7

I’d like to talk about a book called Animal Farm, which was written by George Orwell. I read it two years ago in Tbilisi, because my English teacher asked us to read it for our literature class. The story is set on a farm where the animals decide to chase out the farmer and run things themselves. There are pigs, horses, sheep and dogs in it. The sheep repeat the same slogans all the time, and the dogs help the pigs to keep control. I liked how each kind of animal has its own personality, just like people we know. At first everything goes well, but gradually the pigs become the new rulers and start behaving like the farmer. Boxer, the horse, works tirelessly for everyone, and the way the pigs treat him at the endNoun phrase used as a subject; controlled structure is really upsetting; I almost cried when I read that part. In my opinion, it’s an excellent book because it looks like a simple children’s story, but it’s actually an allegory about powerPrecise topic vocabulary and how it can change people. It’s also quite short, so it was more easyComparative error: should be “easier” to finish than I expected. What I liked mostClear signpost for the opinion was that the language is plain, yet the message is serious, and I think everybody should read it, young people and adults alike, because it’s still highly relevant todayNatural collocation. After I finished it, my classmates and I had a long discussion in class, and our teacher was clearly pleased that we had noticed so much.

Band 8

I’d like to talk about a book called Animal Farm, by George Orwell. I read it two years ago in Tbilisi, because my English teacher asked us to read it for our literature class. The story is set on a farm where the animals decide to drive out the farmer and run things for themselves. There are pigs, horses, sheep and dogs, and at first everything goes well, but gradually the pigs become the new rulers and start behaving just like the farmer they replaced. The sheep chant the same slogans over and over, while the dogs enforce the pigs’ wishes, and I enjoyed how each kind of animal stands for a different type of person. Boxer, the horse, works tirelessly for everyone, and the way he is treated by the pigs in the endPassive structure within a noun phrase, used accurately genuinely upset me; I almost cried. In my opinion, it’s an excellent book, because what looks like a simple children’s story is really an allegory about how power can corruptPrecise, idiomatic topic vocabulary. It’s also short and written in plain language, so it was far easier to finish than I expected, yet the message is serious. If I had to pick one thing that stayed with meNatural discourse marker introducing a personal reflection, it would be how quickly the other animals stopped questioning what they were told. I’d urge everybody to read it, young people and adults alike, because it remains strikingly relevantPrecise, natural phrasing today. When we finished it, my classmates and I had a lively discussion in class, and our teacher was delighted that we had noticed so much beneath the surface.