Describe a person who taught you a skill

Band 6

I would like to talk about my uncle Bakyt, who teachLỗi thì: phải là “taught” me to swim when I was about eight years old. He is my mother’s younger brother and he lives near Almaty, so every summer we visited his house. I remember the first lesson very well because I was, erTừ ngập ngừng tự nhiên, từ đệm không đáng kể, really afraid of the water. We went to a small lake outside the city, and he don’t letLỗi trợ động từ: phải là “didn’t let” me jump in at once. First he held my hands and showed me how to move my legs, and then he asked me to put my face in the water, which was the most difficult part. He told me that everybody is afraid at the beginning, and this made me feel a little better. Every weekend we practiseLỗi thì: phải là “practised” for about a month, and he was always patient and never shouted when I made a mistake. At the end I could swim across the shallow part alone, and I felt very happyTừ vựng cơ bản, hạn chế Lexical Resource and proud. On the last day my mother brought some food to the lake and we had a small picnic together. This skill is important to me for two reasons. First, swimming can keep a person safe, and second, it gave me confidence, because before that month I was afraid of many thingThiếu số nhiều: phải là “many things”. Now I can go to the sea with my friends and I do not worry. You knowCụm từ đệm dùng để ngập ngừng, last year I teachLỗi thì: phải là “taught” my younger sister in the same way, and I think my uncle would be proud of both of us.

Band 7

I’d like to talk about my uncle Bakyt, who taught me to swim when I was about eight years old. He’s my mother’s younger brother and he lives near Almaty, so we spent every summer at his house. I remember the first lesson clearly because I was genuinely terrified of the waterTừ nhấn mạnh và tính từ chính xác, tự nhiên. We went to a small lake outside the city, and he wouldn’t let me jump in until I’d got used to itThì quá khứ hoàn thành sau “until” được dùng chính xác. First he held my hands and showed me how to kick, and then he ask meLỗi thì: phải là “asked me” to put my face in the water, which was by far the hardest part. He told me that everybody is afraid at the beginning, which made me feel a little better. We practised every weekend for about a month, and he was endlessly patientCollocation chính xác and never shouted when I made a mistake. By the end I could swim across the shallow part on my own, and I felt proud and a little bit relievedTừ vựng cảm xúc tự nhiên. On the last day my mother brought some food to the lake and we had a small picnic together. The skill matters to me for two reasons. Firstly, swimming can keep a person safe, and secondly it gave me confidence, because before that month I used to be afraid of all sorts of things“Used to” cho một trạng thái trong quá khứ, dùng chính xác. Nowadays I can go to the sea with my friends without worrying. What’s moreCụm nối giúp thêm ý một cách tự nhiên, last year I taught my younger sister in same wayThiếu mạo từ: phải là “in the same way”, and I think my uncle would be proud of both of us.

Band 8

I’d like to talk about my uncle Bakyt, who taught me to swim when I was about eight. He’s my mother’s younger brother and lives near Almaty, so we spent every summer at his house. I remember the first lesson vividly, because I was petrified of the waterTính từ mạnh, chính xác. We went to a small lake outside the city, and he wouldn’t let me jump in until I’d got used to it. First he held my hands and showed me how to kick, and then he coaxed me into putting my face under the waterĐộng từ chính xác kèm mẫu động từ tự nhiên, which was by far the hardest part. He reassured me that everybody is afraid at the beginning, which helped more than I’d expected. We practised every weekend for about a month, and he was endlessly patient: not once did he raise his voiceĐảo ngữ sau trạng ngữ phủ định, dùng chính xác when I got something wrong. By the end I could swim across the shallow part unaided, and I felt proud and quietly relieved. On the final day my mother brought food to the lake and we celebrated with a small picnic. The skill matters to me for two reasons. Firstly, it’s a matter of safety, since anyone who spends time near water ought to be able to swim. Secondly, it changed how I deal with fear: having managed that once, I stopped assuming I’d fail before I triedMệnh đề phân từ hoàn thành nối nguyên nhân với kết quả. Nowadays I can spend a day at the sea with friends without a flicker of worry. Funnily enoughDiscourse marker dẫn vào một sự trùng hợp thú vị, last year I taught my younger sister in exactly the same way, which felt like passing the favour onCách diễn đạt mang tính thành ngữ, tự nhiên, and I suspect my uncle would be proud of us both.