Describe a person who taught you a skill

Band 6

I would like to talk about my uncle Bakyt, who teachПомилка в часі: має бути «taught» me to swim when I was about eight years old. He is my mother’s younger brother and he lives near Almaty, so every summer we visited his house. I remember the first lesson very well because I was, erПриродна пауза, незначне слово-паразит, really afraid of the water. We went to a small lake outside the city, and he don’t letПомилка в допоміжному дієслові: має бути «didn’t let» me jump in at once. First he held my hands and showed me how to move my legs, and then he asked me to put my face in the water, which was the most difficult part. He told me that everybody is afraid at the beginning, and this made me feel a little better. Every weekend we practiseПомилка в часі: має бути «practised» for about a month, and he was always patient and never shouted when I made a mistake. At the end I could swim across the shallow part alone, and I felt very happyБазова лексика; обмежує Lexical Resource and proud. On the last day my mother brought some food to the lake and we had a small picnic together. This skill is important to me for two reasons. First, swimming can keep a person safe, and second, it gave me confidence, because before that month I was afraid of many thingПомилка у множині: має бути «many things». Now I can go to the sea with my friends and I do not worry. You knowСлово-паразит як маркер запинки, last year I teachПомилка в часі: має бути «taught» my younger sister in the same way, and I think my uncle would be proud of both of us.

Band 7

I’d like to talk about my uncle Bakyt, who taught me to swim when I was about eight years old. He’s my mother’s younger brother and he lives near Almaty, so we spent every summer at his house. I remember the first lesson clearly because I was genuinely terrified of the waterТочний, природний підсилювач і прикметник. We went to a small lake outside the city, and he wouldn’t let me jump in until I’d got used to itPast Perfect після «until», вжитий правильно. First he held my hands and showed me how to kick, and then he ask meПомилка в часі: має бути «asked me» to put my face in the water, which was by far the hardest part. He told me that everybody is afraid at the beginning, which made me feel a little better. We practised every weekend for about a month, and he was endlessly patientТочна колокація and never shouted when I made a mistake. By the end I could swim across the shallow part on my own, and I felt proud and a little bit relievedПриродна лексика на позначення емоцій. On the last day my mother brought some food to the lake and we had a small picnic together. The skill matters to me for two reasons. Firstly, swimming can keep a person safe, and secondly it gave me confidence, because before that month I used to be afraid of all sorts of things«Used to» для стану в минулому, вжито правильно. Nowadays I can go to the sea with my friends without worrying. What’s moreСполучний зворот природно додає думку, last year I taught my younger sister in same wayБракує артикля: має бути «in the same way», and I think my uncle would be proud of both of us.

Band 8

I’d like to talk about my uncle Bakyt, who taught me to swim when I was about eight. He’s my mother’s younger brother and lives near Almaty, so we spent every summer at his house. I remember the first lesson vividly, because I was petrified of the waterСильний, точний прикметник. We went to a small lake outside the city, and he wouldn’t let me jump in until I’d got used to it. First he held my hands and showed me how to kick, and then he coaxed me into putting my face under the waterТочне дієслово з природною конструкцією, which was by far the hardest part. He reassured me that everybody is afraid at the beginning, which helped more than I’d expected. We practised every weekend for about a month, and he was endlessly patient: not once did he raise his voiceInversion після заперечного обставинного звороту, вжита правильно when I got something wrong. By the end I could swim across the shallow part unaided, and I felt proud and quietly relieved. On the final day my mother brought food to the lake and we celebrated with a small picnic. The skill matters to me for two reasons. Firstly, it’s a matter of safety, since anyone who spends time near water ought to be able to swim. Secondly, it changed how I deal with fear: having managed that once, I stopped assuming I’d fail before I triedPerfect participle clause, що пов’язує причину й наслідок. Nowadays I can spend a day at the sea with friends without a flicker of worry. Funnily enoughДискурсивний маркер, що вводить приємний збіг, last year I taught my younger sister in exactly the same way, which felt like passing the favour onПриродне ідіоматичне формулювання, and I suspect my uncle would be proud of us both.