Describe a person who taught you a skill

Band 6

I would like to talk about my uncle Bakyt, who teachErro de tempo verbal: deveria ser “taught” me to swim when I was about eight years old. He is my mother’s younger brother and he lives near Almaty, so every summer we visited his house. I remember the first lesson very well because I was, erMarcador de hesitação natural, pequena muleta de linguagem, really afraid of the water. We went to a small lake outside the city, and he don’t letErro de auxiliar: deveria ser “didn’t let” me jump in at once. First he held my hands and showed me how to move my legs, and then he asked me to put my face in the water, which was the most difficult part. He told me that everybody is afraid at the beginning, and this made me feel a little better. Every weekend we practiseErro de tempo verbal: deveria ser “practised” for about a month, and he was always patient and never shouted when I made a mistake. At the end I could swim across the shallow part alone, and I felt very happyVocabulário básico; limita o Lexical Resource and proud. On the last day my mother brought some food to the lake and we had a small picnic together. This skill is important to me for two reasons. First, swimming can keep a person safe, and second, it gave me confidence, because before that month I was afraid of many thingErro de plural: deveria ser “many things”. Now I can go to the sea with my friends and I do not worry. You knowMuleta de linguagem usada como marcador de hesitação, last year I teachErro de tempo verbal: deveria ser “taught” my younger sister in the same way, and I think my uncle would be proud of both of us.

Band 7

I’d like to talk about my uncle Bakyt, who taught me to swim when I was about eight years old. He’s my mother’s younger brother and he lives near Almaty, so we spent every summer at his house. I remember the first lesson clearly because I was genuinely terrified of the waterIntensificador e adjetivo precisos e naturais. We went to a small lake outside the city, and he wouldn’t let me jump in until I’d got used to itPast perfect depois de “until”, usado corretamente. First he held my hands and showed me how to kick, and then he ask meErro de tempo verbal: deveria ser “asked me” to put my face in the water, which was by far the hardest part. He told me that everybody is afraid at the beginning, which made me feel a little better. We practised every weekend for about a month, and he was endlessly patientColocação precisa and never shouted when I made a mistake. By the end I could swim across the shallow part on my own, and I felt proud and a little bit relievedVocabulário emocional natural. On the last day my mother brought some food to the lake and we had a small picnic together. The skill matters to me for two reasons. Firstly, swimming can keep a person safe, and secondly it gave me confidence, because before that month I used to be afraid of all sorts of things”Used to” para um estado do passado, usado corretamente. Nowadays I can go to the sea with my friends without worrying. What’s moreExpressão de ligação que acrescenta um ponto com naturalidade, last year I taught my younger sister in same wayArtigo ausente: deveria ser “in the same way”, and I think my uncle would be proud of both of us.

Band 8

I’d like to talk about my uncle Bakyt, who taught me to swim when I was about eight. He’s my mother’s younger brother and lives near Almaty, so we spent every summer at his house. I remember the first lesson vividly, because I was petrified of the waterAdjetivo forte e preciso. We went to a small lake outside the city, and he wouldn’t let me jump in until I’d got used to it. First he held my hands and showed me how to kick, and then he coaxed me into putting my face under the waterVerbo preciso com uma regência verbal natural, which was by far the hardest part. He reassured me that everybody is afraid at the beginning, which helped more than I’d expected. We practised every weekend for about a month, and he was endlessly patient: not once did he raise his voiceInversão depois de advérbio negativo, usada corretamente when I got something wrong. By the end I could swim across the shallow part unaided, and I felt proud and quietly relieved. On the final day my mother brought food to the lake and we celebrated with a small picnic. The skill matters to me for two reasons. Firstly, it’s a matter of safety, since anyone who spends time near water ought to be able to swim. Secondly, it changed how I deal with fear: having managed that once, I stopped assuming I’d fail before I triedOração com particípio perfeito que liga causa e resultado. Nowadays I can spend a day at the sea with friends without a flicker of worry. Funnily enoughMarcador de discurso que introduz uma coincidência agradável, last year I taught my younger sister in exactly the same way, which felt like passing the favour onExpressão idiomática natural, and I suspect my uncle would be proud of us both.