Describe something you saved money to buy

Band 6

I’d like to describe an acoustic guitar that I saved money to buy two years ago. I live in Lagos, and I am wantingBentuk kata kerja salah: seharusnya “had wanted” atau “wanted” a guitar since I was fifteen, because my uncle played one every Sunday after church and I loved the sound. My family could not buy it for me, so I decided to save by myself. It takeKesalahan sesaat pada tenses: seharusnya “took” me about nine months. I worked on Saturdays in my cousin’s phone shop, and I also stopKesalahan sesaat pada tenses: seharusnya “stopped” buying snacks after class, which was, erKata pengisi saat mencari gagasan berikutnya, quite hard because my friends always went to the cafe. Every month I put the money in a small tin box under my bed and I counted it again and again. In the sixth month my phone breakKesalahan sesaat pada tenses: seharusnya “broke” and I almost useKesalahan bentuk kata kerja: seharusnya “used” the money to fix it, but my uncle said I must wait. I wanted the guitar because music helps me relax after a long day, and also I wanted to play songs with the group from my church. When I finally had enough money, I went to a music shop near my university with my uncle, and he helped me choose a goodKata sifat dasar; membatasi Lexical Resource one. I felt very, very happyPenguat dasar yang diulang, bukan kata yang tepat when I carried it home. I didn’t sleptKesalahan bentuk kata kerja: seharusnya “didn’t sleep” much that night because I playKesalahan sesaat pada tenses: seharusnya “played” until my mother told me to stop. I think saving for it was a good experienceFrasa yang kabur; membatasi Lexical Resource, because now I take care itKata depan hilang: seharusnya “take care of it” very carefully. Now I play it at church on Sundays, next to my uncle, and I am very proud when people listen.

Band 7

I’d like to describe an acoustic guitar that I saved up for two years ago. I live in Lagos, and I’d wanted a guitar ever since I was fifteen, because my uncle played one every Sunday after church and I loved the sound. My family couldn’t afford to buy it for me, so I decided to put money asideKolokasi yang alami untuk menabung myself, and it took me about nine months. I worked on Saturdays in my cousin’s phone shop, and I gave up buying snacks after class, which was harder than I expected because my friends always went to the cafeBentuk komparatif dengan klausa alasan, dipakai dengan akurat. Every month I’d drop what I’d earned into a small tin box under my bed and count it again and again. In the sixth month my phone broke and I was tempted to spend the money on a new screen, but my uncle told me to hold on, so I did. I wanted the guitar because music helps me unwind after a long day, and I hoped to play along with the group from my church. When I finally had enough, I went to a music shop near my university with my uncle, who helped me pick out a really nice oneKata sifat umum yang aman; kata yang lebih tepat akan menaikkan ragam kosakata. I felt incredibly proudKata perasaan yang lebih kuat dan tepat carrying it home. I hardly slept that night because I kept playing until my mother told to meKesalahan urutan kata: seharusnya “told me” to stop. Looking back, saving for it made me appreciate it more than if someone had simply handed it to meKlausa reflektif menghubungkan usaha dengan perasaan, and I look after it very carefully, so it’s still in a perfect conditionKesalahan kata sandang: “in perfect condition” tidak memakai kata sandang. Now I play it at church on Sundays, right next to my uncle.

Band 8

I’d like to describe an acoustic guitar that I saved up for two years ago. I live in Lagos, and I’d had my heart set on one ever since I was fifteen, when my uncle started playing his every Sunday after church. My family couldn’t afford to buy it for me, so I decided to put the money aside myself, and it took me about nine months. I worked on Saturdays in my cousin’s phone shop and went without snacks after class, which was harder than I’d expected, given that my friends were always at the cafeKomparatif dengan klausa sebab, terkendali dan alami. Every month I’d drop what I’d earned into a small tin box under my bed and count it again, as if it might have multiplied overnight. In the sixth month my phone broke and I was sorely temptedKolokasi yang tepat yang menunjukkan pergulatan batin yang nyata to spend the money on a new screen, but my uncle urged me to hold on, and I’m glad I did. I wanted the guitar because music helps me unwind after a long day, and I hoped to play along with the group from my church. When I finally had enough, I went to a music shop near my university with my uncle, who helped me pick out one with a warm, full soundDeskripsi spesifik, bukan kata sifat umum. I was over the moonUngkapan idiomatis untuk kegembiraan besar carrying it home. I hardly slept that night because I kept playing until my mother had to come in and ask me to stopFrasa naratif yang alami dengan tense yang tepat. Looking back, what I value most is not the guitar itself but the months it representsKalimat belah yang memberi poin penutup yang jelas, which is probably why I still treat it with such care. Now I play it at church on Sundays, right next to my uncle, and being listened to feels like a reward I earnedFrasa ringkas dan alami yang menggemakan tema usaha.