Describe something you saved money to buy

Band 6

I’d like to describe an acoustic guitar that I saved money to buy two years ago. I live in Lagos, and I am wanting동사 형태 오류: 올바른 형태는 “had wanted” 또는 “wanted” a guitar since I was fifteen, because my uncle played one every Sunday after church and I loved the sound. My family could not buy it for me, so I decided to save by myself. It take시제 오류: 올바른 형태는 “took” me about nine months. I worked on Saturdays in my cousin’s phone shop, and I also stop시제 오류: 올바른 형태는 “stopped” buying snacks after class, which was, er다음 말을 찾는 동안 쓴 군말, quite hard because my friends always went to the cafe. Every month I put the money in a small tin box under my bed and I counted it again and again. In the sixth month my phone break시제 오류: 올바른 형태는 “broke” and I almost use동사 형태 오류: 올바른 형태는 “used” the money to fix it, but my uncle said I must wait. I wanted the guitar because music helps me relax after a long day, and also I wanted to play songs with the group from my church. When I finally had enough money, I went to a music shop near my university with my uncle, and he helped me choose a good기본적인 형용사, Lexical Resource 점수를 제한함 one. I felt very, very happy정확한 단어 대신 기본적인 강조어를 반복함 when I carried it home. I didn’t slept동사 형태 오류: 올바른 형태는 “didn’t sleep” much that night because I play시제 오류: 올바른 형태는 “played” until my mother told me to stop. I think saving for it was a good experience모호한 표현, Lexical Resource 점수를 제한함, because now I take care it전치사 누락: 올바른 형태는 “take care of it” very carefully. Now I play it at church on Sundays, next to my uncle, and I am very proud when people listen.

Band 7

I’d like to describe an acoustic guitar that I saved up for two years ago. I live in Lagos, and I’d wanted a guitar ever since I was fifteen, because my uncle played one every Sunday after church and I loved the sound. My family couldn’t afford to buy it for me, so I decided to put money aside돈을 모은다는 뜻의 자연스러운 콜로케이션 myself, and it took me about nine months. I worked on Saturdays in my cousin’s phone shop, and I gave up buying snacks after class, which was harder than I expected because my friends always went to the cafe이유절이 있는 비교급을 정확하게 사용. Every month I’d drop what I’d earned into a small tin box under my bed and count it again and again. In the sixth month my phone broke and I was tempted to spend the money on a new screen, but my uncle told me to hold on, so I did. I wanted the guitar because music helps me unwind after a long day, and I hoped to play along with the group from my church. When I finally had enough, I went to a music shop near my university with my uncle, who helped me pick out a really nice one무난하고 일반적인 형용사, 더 정확한 단어를 쓰면 폭이 넓어짐. I felt incredibly proud더 강하고 정확한 감정 표현 carrying it home. I hardly slept that night because I kept playing until my mother told to me어순 오류: 올바른 형태는 “told me” to stop. Looking back, saving for it made me appreciate it more than if someone had simply handed it to me돌아보는 절이 노력과 감정을 연결함, and I look after it very carefully, so it’s still in a perfect condition관사 오류: “in perfect condition”에는 관사가 붙지 않음. Now I play it at church on Sundays, right next to my uncle.

Band 8

I’d like to describe an acoustic guitar that I saved up for two years ago. I live in Lagos, and I’d had my heart set on one ever since I was fifteen, when my uncle started playing his every Sunday after church. My family couldn’t afford to buy it for me, so I decided to put the money aside myself, and it took me about nine months. I worked on Saturdays in my cousin’s phone shop and went without snacks after class, which was harder than I’d expected, given that my friends were always at the cafe이유절이 있는 비교급, 안정적이고 자연스러움. Every month I’d drop what I’d earned into a small tin box under my bed and count it again, as if it might have multiplied overnight. In the sixth month my phone broke and I was sorely tempted실제 내적 갈등을 보여 주는 정확한 콜로케이션 to spend the money on a new screen, but my uncle urged me to hold on, and I’m glad I did. I wanted the guitar because music helps me unwind after a long day, and I hoped to play along with the group from my church. When I finally had enough, I went to a music shop near my university with my uncle, who helped me pick out one with a warm, full sound일반적인 형용사 대신 구체적인 묘사. I was over the moon큰 기쁨을 나타내는 관용 표현 carrying it home. I hardly slept that night because I kept playing until my mother had to come in and ask me to stop올바른 시제를 쓴 자연스러운 서술 표현. Looking back, what I value most is not the guitar itself but the months it represents분명한 마무리 요점을 주는 분열문, which is probably why I still treat it with such care. Now I play it at church on Sundays, right next to my uncle, and being listened to feels like a reward I earned노력이라는 주제를 되짚는 간결하고 자연스러운 표현.