Describe something you saved money to buy

Band 6

I’d like to describe an acoustic guitar that I saved money to buy two years ago. I live in Lagos, and I am wantingYanlış fiil biçimi: “had wanted” veya “wanted” olmalı a guitar since I was fifteen, because my uncle played one every Sunday after church and I loved the sound. My family could not buy it for me, so I decided to save by myself. It takeZaman hatası: “took” olmalı me about nine months. I worked on Saturdays in my cousin’s phone shop, and I also stopZaman hatası: “stopped” olmalı buying snacks after class, which was, erBir sonraki fikri ararken kullanılan dolgu, quite hard because my friends always went to the cafe. Every month I put the money in a small tin box under my bed and I counted it again and again. In the sixth month my phone breakZaman hatası: “broke” olmalı and I almost useFiil biçimi hatası: “used” olmalı the money to fix it, but my uncle said I must wait. I wanted the guitar because music helps me relax after a long day, and also I wanted to play songs with the group from my church. When I finally had enough money, I went to a music shop near my university with my uncle, and he helped me choose a goodBasit sıfat; Lexical Resource puanını sınırlıyor one. I felt very, very happyKesin bir kelime yerine tekrarlanan basit pekiştirme when I carried it home. I didn’t sleptFiil biçimi hatası: “didn’t sleep” olmalı much that night because I playZaman hatası: “played” olmalı until my mother told me to stop. I think saving for it was a good experienceBelirsiz ifade; Lexical Resource puanını sınırlıyor, because now I take care itEksik edat: “take care of it” olmalı very carefully. Now I play it at church on Sundays, next to my uncle, and I am very proud when people listen.

Band 7

I’d like to describe an acoustic guitar that I saved up for two years ago. I live in Lagos, and I’d wanted a guitar ever since I was fifteen, because my uncle played one every Sunday after church and I loved the sound. My family couldn’t afford to buy it for me, so I decided to put money asideBirikim yapmak için doğal collocation myself, and it took me about nine months. I worked on Saturdays in my cousin’s phone shop, and I gave up buying snacks after class, which was harder than I expected because my friends always went to the cafeNeden cümlesiyle kurulmuş karşılaştırma yapısı doğru kullanılmış. Every month I’d drop what I’d earned into a small tin box under my bed and count it again and again. In the sixth month my phone broke and I was tempted to spend the money on a new screen, but my uncle told me to hold on, so I did. I wanted the guitar because music helps me unwind after a long day, and I hoped to play along with the group from my church. When I finally had enough, I went to a music shop near my university with my uncle, who helped me pick out a really nice oneGüvenli, genel bir sıfat; daha isabetli bir kelime çeşitliliği artırırdı. I felt incredibly proudDaha güçlü, daha isabetli duygu kelimesi carrying it home. I hardly slept that night because I kept playing until my mother told to meKelime sırası hatası: “told me” olmalı to stop. Looking back, saving for it made me appreciate it more than if someone had simply handed it to meDüşünceli yan cümle emeği duyguya bağlıyor, and I look after it very carefully, so it’s still in a perfect conditionArticle hatası: “in perfect condition” article almaz. Now I play it at church on Sundays, right next to my uncle.

Band 8

I’d like to describe an acoustic guitar that I saved up for two years ago. I live in Lagos, and I’d had my heart set on one ever since I was fifteen, when my uncle started playing his every Sunday after church. My family couldn’t afford to buy it for me, so I decided to put the money aside myself, and it took me about nine months. I worked on Saturdays in my cousin’s phone shop and went without snacks after class, which was harder than I’d expected, given that my friends were always at the cafeNeden cümleciğiyle kurulmuş karşılaştırma, kontrollü ve doğal. Every month I’d drop what I’d earned into a small tin box under my bed and count it again, as if it might have multiplied overnight. In the sixth month my phone broke and I was sorely temptedGerçek bir iç mücadeleyi gösteren isabetli collocation to spend the money on a new screen, but my uncle urged me to hold on, and I’m glad I did. I wanted the guitar because music helps me unwind after a long day, and I hoped to play along with the group from my church. When I finally had enough, I went to a music shop near my university with my uncle, who helped me pick out one with a warm, full soundGenel bir sıfat yerine belirli bir betimleme. I was over the moonGüçlü sevinci anlatan deyimsel ifade carrying it home. I hardly slept that night because I kept playing until my mother had to come in and ask me to stopDoğru zamanla kurulmuş doğal anlatı ifadesi. Looking back, what I value most is not the guitar itself but the months it representsNet bir son nokta veren cleft sentence, which is probably why I still treat it with such care. Now I play it at church on Sundays, right next to my uncle, and being listened to feels like a reward I earnedEmek temasını yansıtan kısa, doğal ifade.