Describe a person who helped you solve a problem

Band 6

I would like to talk about my cousin’s husband, Ganzorig, who helpLỗi thì: phải là “helped” me with a problem in my family’s shop last November. The shop is in Ulaanbaatar and it sells things for school, and I work there on Saturdays. My aunt owns it, and that year she was giving me more responsibility, so I wanted to do the job well. At that time I looked after the stock list on the computer, but the numbers on the screen wasLỗi hoà hợp chủ ngữ – động từ: phải là “were” not the same as the things on the shelves, and I did not know why. I was very stressedTừ nhấn mạnh và tính từ cơ bản, hạn chế Lexical Resource because my aunt wanted the report on Monday. I, erTừ ngập ngừng tự nhiên, từ đệm không đáng kể, tried to find the mistake for two evenings, but I could not. Then Ganzorig, who is an accountant, comeLỗi thì: phải là “came” to the shop on Sunday when it was closed. He sat next to me and checked the list line by line. After one hour he findLỗi thì: phải là “found” that two deliveries were written two times, so the total was too big. He also showed me an easy way to check the list every week, you knowCụm từ đệm dùng để ngập ngừng, so I will not have the same problem again. I felt very happyTính từ cơ bản, hạn chế Lexical Resource and a little shy because the mistake was so simple. It was make meLỗi dạng động từ: phải là “It made me” feel more confident about my work, and I am really thankful to him. Now I check the list every Saturday before I go home, and my aunt says the report is always correct.

Band 7

I’d like to talk about my cousin’s husband, Ganzorig, who helped me with a problem in my family’s shop last November. The shop is in Ulaanbaatar and sells school supplies, and I work there on Saturdays. My aunt owns it, and that year she’d started trusting me with more responsibility, so I wanted to do the job properly. At that time I was looking after the stock list on the computer, but the numbers on the screen didn’t match what was actually on the shelvesMệnh đề so sánh chính xác ở thì quá khứ, and I couldn’t work out why. I was under a lot of pressureCollocation tự nhiên thay cho một tính từ cơ bản because my aunt wanted the report on Monday. I’d spent two evenings searching for the mistake and I was getting nowhere, to be honestDiscourse marker tự nhiên, thể hiện sự bực bội. Then Ganzorig, who’s an accountant, came to the shop on Sunday, when it was closed. He sat down beside me and went through the list line by line, and within an hour he’d found that two deliveries had been entered twice, which made the total far too high. He also showed me a simple way to check the list every week, so it wouldn’t happen again. Afterwards I felt enormously relievedTrạng từ và tính từ chính xác, and a little embarrassed because the mistake was so much simpleLỗi từ nhấn mạnh: phải là “so simple”. It gave me a lot more confidenceCụm tự nhiên để nói về một tác động lâu dài in my work, and I’m genuinely grateful to him. These days I check the list before I leave every Saturday, and my aunt hasn’t found a single error since.

Band 8

I’d like to talk about my cousin’s husband, Ganzorig, who rescued me from a problem in my family’s shop last November. The shop, in Ulaanbaatar, sells school supplies, and I work there on Saturdays. My aunt owns it, and she had only recently started entrusting me with more responsibility, so I was determined to get it right. At the time I was responsible for the stock list on the computer, but the figures on the screen simply refused to match what was on the shelvesCách diễn đạt tự nhiên, sinh động với thì quá khứ chính xác, and I couldn’t work out why. I was under real pressureCollocation chính xác, since my aunt expected the report on Monday, and after two evenings of searching I was at a complete lossCách diễn đạt mang tính thành ngữ để nói về việc không biết làm gì. Then Ganzorig, an accountant, came to the shop on Sunday, when it was closed. He sat beside me, went through the list line by line, and within an hour had spotted that two deliveries had been entered twice, which inflated the totalThì quá khứ hoàn thành và mệnh đề quan hệ được dùng chính xác. He also talked me through a simple weekly checkCụm diễn đạt chính xác so that it wouldn’t happen again. I felt enormously relieved, and slightly embarrassed that the cause was so simple, but what stayed with me more than anythingDiscourse marker tự nhiên, dẫn vào phần suy ngẫm was how patiently he explained it, without making me feel foolish. It was a weight off my mind, and it has made me far readier to ask for help early instead of struggling alone. These days I check the list before locking up every Saturday, and the weekly routine he suggested has not failed me once.