雅思IELTS「discuss both views」型作文的Band 6、7、8版本

Band 6

In the modern world, people have different opinions about how children learn best. Many parents also ask this question when their children start school. Some people think that outdoor play is better, but other people think that books and games inside the house are more useful. In my opinion, I think both are important, but playing outside is more important.

Firstly「Firstly」和「Secondly」是主體段落之間唯一的連接, many people say that playing outside is good for children. When children play in the enviroment拼字錯誤：應為「environment」, they can run and jump and this is good for the health. They can also see nature and breathe fresh air. Also, they learn to play with other children. For example, a group of children make a house from branches and they work together. This is a good experience for them.

Secondly, other people think that children should stay inside and read books or play educational games. Nowadays children have many games on the computer and some of them are good. They say that books give children knowledge and this is important for school. Children can read about many things in the books and this is useful論點只被點出，沒有說明；沒有舉例說明書本教得到而遊戲教不到的是什麼. Also the games is主詞動詞不一致：應為「the games are」 good for the mathematics.

However, I think playing outside is more important for small children. They need to do friends動詞錯誤：應為「make friends」 and they are too much young詞序錯誤：應為「too young」 to sit for a long time. When they are older, books will become more important.

In conclusion唯一標示結論段的訊號，之後卻重複前面的論點, both views have some good points and children need both kinds of learning. I think outdoor play is more important, as I said before結論重複了引言，也沒有為這個先後順序提出新的理由. It is a difficult question but I think it is true.

Band 7

People disagree about how children learn best. Some believe that playing outdoors teaches more, while others argue that time indoors with books and educational games is more useful. Each view has some truth, so the answer depends on what is being learned. I think both matter, but outdoor play matters more for young children意見寫成一句話，讀者可以直接複述.

Supporters of outdoor play point out that children learn physical and social skills there. When a group builds a shelter from branches, they have to agree who does what, and they find out for themselves which branches will hold具體而自然的措辭，讓例子更明確. This kind of learning by testing is difficult to copy in a classroom, and it teaches children to cooperate and to solve problems by their own片語錯誤：應為「on their own」. They also get exercise, which helps them to sleep and to concentrate later in the day.

On the other hand標示轉向第二種觀點；這個段落只談那一種觀點, supporters of indoor learning argue that books give children knowledge that play does not supply. A child who reads a story about the sea meets words and facts that no playground would offer, and structured games can practise numbers and spelling in a way that holds attention. Reading also builds the patience needed for longer tasks. Even so, this knowledge is easier to absorb when a child already has experience to attach it to讓步之後接著「when」子句，用法準確，並且回扣意見.

For these reasons, I believe outdoor play should come first for young children. Parents and teachers should therefore protect time outdoors, especially in the early years. A child who has built, climbed and argued with friends reads about those things with more understanding意見有理由支持，而不只是重複. In conclusion放在這裡合適，但作為訊號稍微用得過多, the two views are not opposed, because indoor learning builds on what outdoor play begins.

Band 8

Children learn in different settings, and the real question is what each setting teaches best. Each view contains a real truth, and the disagreement is mostly about order. I take the view that outdoor play matters more for young children, while accepting that books supply something play cannot意見寫成一句話，同時承認並回應了另一種觀點.

Those who favour outdoor play are right that it teaches skills that cannot be handed over in words. When a group builds a shelter from branches, it must agree who does what and discover, by failing, which branches will hold精確的動詞和簡潔的片語. That kind of learning指回搭建庇護所的例子，也就是一件明確的事 is difficult to stage in a classroom, because the consequences are real: a roof that collapses teaches more quickly than any warning against it. Physical effort has a second benefit: a child who has spent an hour running tends to settle more easily afterwards.

Advocates of indoor study make an equally serious point. Books and structured games give children a vocabulary and a store of facts that no playground supplies精確的名詞，每一個都說出實際得到了什麼. A child who has read about the sea meets tides, currents and unfamiliar words that conversation among friends will rarely produce, and a well-designed number game can practise skills that unstructured play leaves untouched平行結構，平衡而且準確. Neither of these gains is trivial, and a school day without them would be poorer.

The two are not equals at every age, however意見得到論述：先後順序取決於孩子的年齡. A child who has built, climbed and argued with friends reads about those things with understanding, whereas reading that comes first has nothing to attach itself to. Outdoor play should therefore come first, with indoor learning building on what it begins以分詞片語為意見作結，乾淨俐落. Parents can act on this by protecting outdoor time in the early years and adding structured reading as the child grows.