Describe a person you know who is very organised

Band 6

I would like to talk about my older sister Achieng, who liveSubject-verb agreement: should be “lives” in Kisumu. She works as a pharmacist in a hospital and she is also studying for a master’s degree in the evenings, so her days are, erNatural hesitation marker, minor filler, very busy. To stay organised she uses a paper planner and a calendar on her phone, and every night she prepareSubject-verb agreement: should be “prepares” her bag and her clothes for the next day. On Sunday evening she sits down for ten minutes and plans the whole week. She also puts reminders on her phone for small things like paying bills or calling our parents. I notice this when our family plans something together. Last year our mother turned sixty, and Achieng makeTense slip: should be “made” one page with the guest list, the food and the transport, so everything goTense slip: should be “went” well on the day. I also notice it when she studies, because her notes isAgreement error: should be “are” in different colours and she knows what she will read on each day. Sometimes her friends laugh at her because she is always early for everything, but she don’t mindSubject-verb agreement: should be “doesn’t mind”. Being organised is important to her because in a pharmacy a small mistake with a medicine can be very badBasic vocabulary; limits Lexical Resource for a patient. It also helps her to not have stressBasic and unnatural phrasing; a precise verb phrase such as “avoid panicking” would score higher when she is tired. Once I asked her how she does it, and she said that a plan takes ten minutes but it saves her many hours. You knowFiller phrase used as a hesitation marker, I am not like her, I always do things at the last timeUnnatural phrase; “at the last minute” is the usual expression, so I think she is a very goodBasic adjective; “admirable” would show more range example for me.

Band 7

I’d like to talk about my older sister Achieng, who lives in Kisumu. She works as a pharmacist in a hospital and she’s also studying for a master’s degree in the evenings, so her days are extremely busy. To stay organised she uses a paper planner and a calendar on her phone, and every night she packs her bag and lays out her clothes for the next day. On Sunday evening she sits down for ten minutes and plans the whole week. She also sets reminders on her phone for small things like paying bills or calling our parents. I notice this most when our family organises something together. Last year our mother turned sixty, and Achieng put the guest list, the food and the transport on one page, so everything went smoothly on the dayResult clause linked accurately to the previous action. I also see it in the way she studies: her notes are colour-coded and she knows exactly what she’ll revise on every dayPreposition slip: should be “revise each day” or “on each day”. Her friends sometimes tease her for always arriving early, but she doesn’t mind. Being organised matters to her because in a pharmacy a small mistake with a dosePrecise, topic-specific noun phrase could seriously harm a patient. It also means she hardly ever has to panicNatural link back to the reason when she’s tired. When I asked her how she does it, she said that a plan takes ten minutes but saves her hours. Honestly, I’m not like her, I usually leave things until the last minute, so she’s a real example for me of how much calmer life can be.

Band 8

I’d like to talk about my older sister Achieng, who lives in Kisumu and is easily the most organised person I know. She works as a pharmacist in a hospital and is studying part time for a master’s degree, so her days are tightly packed. To keep on top of everything she uses a paper planner and a phone calendar, and every night she packs her bag and lays out her clothes for the following day. Every Sunday evening she sits down for ten minutes and maps out the whole week. She even sets phone reminders for small things such as paying bills or calling our parents. I notice this most whenever the family organises something together. When our mother turned sixty, Achieng put the guest list, the food and the transport on a single page, and nothing went wrong on the day, whereas I would probably have forgotten the cakeContrastive clause with a conditional that adds personality. I also see it in the way she studies: her notes are colour-coded and she knows exactly what she’ll revise each day. Her friends tease her for turning up early everywhereNatural, informal phrasal verb with a precise sense, yet she takes it as a compliment. Being organised matters to her because in a pharmacy a small mistake with a dosePrecise, topic-specific noun phrase could seriously harm a patient, and being methodical is part of being responsibleAbstract link between habit and character. It also spares her the panic that comes from rushingNatural, flexible explanation of the personal benefit. When I once asked her how she does it, she laughed and said that a plan takes ten minutes but saves hours. Honestly, I find it both inspiring and slightly intimidating, and I’m slowly borrowing a few of her habits.