Describe a happy person you know

Band 6

I would like to talk about my aunt Amina, who is the younger sister of my mother. She lives in Mombasa in Kenya, and she has a small tailoring shop near the old town. She opened it fifteen years ago and now three women works主詞動詞不一致：應為「work」 there with her. She is very happy person漏掉冠詞：應為「a very happy person」, I think, and everybody who know主詞動詞不一致：應為「knows」 her says the same. She is warm and talkative, and she is also very generous. She laugh主詞動詞不一致：應為「laughs」 loudly, and the laugh is so big that people in the street turn their heads, you know當作停頓使用的填充詞. While she is sewing, she sings old songs, and sometimes my cousins is dancing主詞動詞不一致：應為「are dancing」 around the shop with her. She greets every customer by name and she often bring主詞動詞不一致：應為「brings」 snacks for the neighbours. If somebody has a problem she always stops her work to listen, and she never says that she is too busy. I think she is happy because she is content with what she has. She does not compare herself with other people, er自然的停頓，填充詞不顯眼, and she spends time with her family every day. She also says thank you for small things, like a good meal or good weather基本詞彙，限制了Lexical Resource的分數. Even on difficult days she tells jokes, and the customers go home smiling. The neighbours say that the street feels quiet when she travels. When I am with her I feeled動詞形式錯誤：應為「feel」 relaxed and I forget my worries. She is a very good基本形容詞，限制了Lexical Resource的分數 example of a happy person.

Band 7

I’d like to talk about my aunt Amina, my mother’s younger sister. She lives in Mombasa, in Kenya, and she runs a small tailoring shop near the old town. She opened it fifteen years ago, and now three women work there with her. She’s one of the most cheerful people I know自然的最高級，搭配關係子句, and everybody who meets her says the same. She’s warm, talkative and very generous. She has a big laugh, and it’s so loud that people in the street turn their heads. While she’s sewing she sings old songs, and sometimes my cousins dances主詞動詞不一致：應為「dance」 around the shop with her. She greets every customer by name and often brings snacks for the neighbours. If someone has a problem she’ll stop whatever she’s doing to listen, and she never says she’s too busy. I think she’s happy because she’s content with what she has正確使用名詞性的「what」子句. She doesn’t compare herself with other people, and she spends time with her family every day. She also counts her blessings慣用說法，用法自然, thanking people for small things such as a good meal or a cool breeze from the sea. Even on difficult days she tells jokes, and customers leave the shop smiling. The neighbours say that the street feels quiet when she travels. When I’m with her I feel relaxed and I forget my worries, which I think says a lot自然的連接用語，補上個人看法. She really is a living example of what a positive outlook can do.

Band 8

I’d like to talk about my aunt Amina, my mother’s younger sister. She lives in Mombasa, in Kenya, and she runs a small tailoring shop near the old town. She opened it fifteen years ago, and three women now work alongside her. She’s one of the most cheerful people I know自然的最高級，搭配關係子句, and everybody who meets her says the same. She’s warm, talkative and exceptionally generous. Her laugh is so loud that people in the street turn their heads, and while she’s sewing she sings old songs, so my cousins often end up dancing around the shop with her分詞子句接在「end up」之後，用法自然. She greets every customer by name and regularly brings snacks round for the neighbours. If someone is struggling she’ll put down her scissors to listen, and she has never once said she was too busy. As for why she’s happy, I think it comes down to the fact that she’s content with what she has. She never compares herself with other people, she spends time with her family every day, and she counts her blessings慣用說法，用法自然, thanking people for small things such as a good meal or a cool breeze from the sea. Even on difficult days she cracks jokes, and customers leave the shop smiling. The neighbours say that the street feels quiet when she travels. Honestly,引出個人反思的話語標記 when I’m with her I feel relaxed and my worries seem to melt away慣用片語動詞，用法自然. She is living proof of how much a positive outlook can change an ordinary day抽象名詞片語搭配複雜的補語.