Describe a happy person you know

Band 6

I would like to talk about my aunt Amina, who is the younger sister of my mother. She lives in Mombasa in Kenya, and she has a small tailoring shop near the old town. She opened it fifteen years ago and now three women worksНеузгодженість підмета й присудка: має бути «work» there with her. She is very happy personПропущений артикль: має бути «a very happy person», I think, and everybody who knowНеузгодженість підмета й присудка: має бути «knows» her says the same. She is warm and talkative, and she is also very generous. She laughНеузгодженість підмета й присудка: має бути «laughs» loudly, and the laugh is so big that people in the street turn their heads, you knowСлово-паразит як маркер вагання. While she is sewing, she sings old songs, and sometimes my cousins is dancingПомилка узгодження: має бути «are dancing» around the shop with her. She greets every customer by name and she often bringНеузгодженість підмета й присудка: має бути «brings» snacks for the neighbours. If somebody has a problem she always stops her work to listen, and she never says that she is too busy. I think she is happy because she is content with what she has. She does not compare herself with other people, erПриродна пауза вагання, незначне слово-паразит, and she spends time with her family every day. She also says thank you for small things, like a good meal or good weatherБазова лексика; обмежує Lexical Resource. Even on difficult days she tells jokes, and the customers go home smiling. The neighbours say that the street feels quiet when she travels. When I am with her I feeledПомилка у формі дієслова: має бути «feel» relaxed and I forget my worries. She is a very goodБазове прикметникове слово; обмежує Lexical Resource example of a happy person.

Band 7

I’d like to talk about my aunt Amina, my mother’s younger sister. She lives in Mombasa, in Kenya, and she runs a small tailoring shop near the old town. She opened it fifteen years ago, and now three women work there with her. She’s one of the most cheerful people I knowПриродний найвищий ступінь із означальним підрядним реченням, and everybody who meets her says the same. She’s warm, talkative and very generous. She has a big laugh, and it’s so loud that people in the street turn their heads. While she’s sewing she sings old songs, and sometimes my cousins dancesПомилка узгодження: має бути «dance» around the shop with her. She greets every customer by name and often brings snacks for the neighbours. If someone has a problem she’ll stop whatever she’s doing to listen, and she never says she’s too busy. I think she’s happy because she’s content with what she hasПідрядне «what» у ролі іменника, вжите правильно. She doesn’t compare herself with other people, and she spends time with her family every day. She also counts her blessingsІдіоматичний вислів, вжитий природно, thanking people for small things such as a good meal or a cool breeze from the sea. Even on difficult days she tells jokes, and customers leave the shop smiling. The neighbours say that the street feels quiet when she travels. When I’m with her I feel relaxed and I forget my worries, which I think says a lotСполучна фраза, що додає особистий коментар. She really is a living example of what a positive outlook can do.

Band 8

I’d like to talk about my aunt Amina, my mother’s younger sister. She lives in Mombasa, in Kenya, and she runs a small tailoring shop near the old town. She opened it fifteen years ago, and three women now work alongside her. She’s one of the most cheerful people I knowПриродний найвищий ступінь із означальним підрядним реченням, and everybody who meets her says the same. She’s warm, talkative and exceptionally generous. Her laugh is so loud that people in the street turn their heads, and while she’s sewing she sings old songs, so my cousins often end up dancing around the shop with herДієприкметниковий зворот, вжитий природно після «end up». She greets every customer by name and regularly brings snacks round for the neighbours. If someone is struggling she’ll put down her scissors to listen, and she has never once said she was too busy. As for why she’s happy, I think it comes down to the fact that she’s content with what she has. She never compares herself with other people, she spends time with her family every day, and she counts her blessingsІдіоматичний вислів, вжитий природно, thanking people for small things such as a good meal or a cool breeze from the sea. Even on difficult days she cracks jokes, and customers leave the shop smiling. The neighbours say that the street feels quiet when she travels. Honestly,Дискурсивний маркер, що вводить особисту рефлексію when I’m with her I feel relaxed and my worries seem to melt awayІдіоматичне фразове дієслово, вжите природно. She is living proof of how much a positive outlook can change an ordinary dayІменникова група з абстрактним іменником і складним доповненням.