Describe a public building you enjoy visiting

Band 6

I want to describe the public library in my neighbourhood in Curitiba, which is a place I really enjoy to visitОшибка в модели глагола: должно быть «enjoy visiting». It is about ten minutes from my house, near a small park. I first knowОшибка времени: должно быть «got to know» it when I was ten years old because my grandmother bringОшибка времени: должно быть «took» или «brought» me there to find books for a school project. At that time I was, erСлово-паразит, заминка, a little shy, but the librarian was very kind and she showed me the children’s corner. Now the building looks very old and very niceПростые повторяющиеся прилагательные; ограничивают Lexical Resource. It has a glass front and a high ceiling, and inside there are long wooden tables where people read and study. There are a lot of windows, so the room has good lightПростое сочетание; «plenty of natural light» точнее even in the afternoon. On weekends they also have small events, for example a book club for teenagers and drawing lessons for children. I usually go on Saturday morning and stay since three hoursОшибка в предлоге: должно быть «for three hours», and I always leave with a good feelingПростая фраза; «a sense of achievement» точнее. The librarians knowsОшибка согласования: должно быть «know» my name now, so it feels more welcome. I enjoy visiting it because it is quiet and I can concentrate meОшибка с возвратным местоимением: должно быть «concentrate» better than at home. Also, I often meet my old school friends there, you knowСлово-паразит, используемое как заминка, and we study together in the same tableОшибка в предлоге: должно быть «at the same table». When I amОшибка времени: должно быть «was» very stressed before exams last year, I went there every day, and it helped me a lot. For me it is not just a building, it is a very good placeПростая фраза; ограничивает Lexical Resource.

Band 7

I’d like to describe the public library in my neighbourhood in Curitiba, which I really enjoy visiting. It’s about ten minutes from my house, near a small park. I first got to know it when I was ten, because my grandmother took me there to find books for a school project. I was quite shy back then, but the librarian was incredibly patientТочный выбор прилагательного and showed me the children’s corner. These days the building looks old but well maintainedЕстественное сочетание слов. It has a glass front and a high ceiling, and inside there are long wooden tables where people read and study. Tall windows fill the room with natural light, even in the afternoon. At weekends it also runs small events, such as a book club for teenagers and drawing classes for children. I usually go on Saturday mornings and stay for about three hours, and I always leave feeling that I’ve achieved something. The librarians know me by name now, which makes the place feel even more welcoming. I enjoy going there because it’s so quiet that I can concentrate more goodОшибка формы: должно быть «concentrate much better» than at home. I also bump into old school friends there, and we usually end up studying togetherЕстественная связующая фраза поддерживает плавность рассказа. When I was under a lot of pressure before my exams last year, I went every day, and it was the only place where I felt properly calmПравильное определительное придаточное с чётким уточнением. For me it’s not just a building, it’s a place where I feelsОшибка согласования: должно быть «I feel» at home.

Band 8

I’d like to describe the public library in my neighbourhood in Curitiba, which I’ve enjoyed visiting for years. It’s about ten minutes from my house, tucked away beside a small park. I first got to know it at the age of ten, when my grandmother took me there to find books for a school project. I was rather shy back then, but the librarian was incredibly patient and showed me the children’s corner. These days the building looks old but well maintained. It has a glass front and a high ceiling, and inside there are long wooden tables where people read and study. Tall windows fill the room with natural light, even late in the afternoon. At weekends it also runs small events, such as a book club for teenagers and drawing classes for children. I usually go on Saturday mornings and stay for about three hours, and I always leave feeling that I’ve genuinely achieved something. The librarians know me by name now, which makes the place feel all the more welcoming. What I value most is how quiet it is, which lets me concentrate far better than I can at homeРасщеплённое предложение с определительным придаточным, точное и естественное. I also bump intoИдиоматичный фразовый глагол old school friends there, and we usually end up studying together. When I was under a lot of pressure before my exams last year, I went every day, and it was the only place where I felt properly at easeТочное, естественное сочетание слов. For me it isn’t merely a building, it’s somewhere I feel at home.