Describe a time you went to a crowded place

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I would like to talk about a very crowded place I goОшибка времени: должно быть «went» to last December, which was Balogun Market in Lagos. I went there on a Saturday morning with my younger sister Chidinma because she wanted to buy some nice clothesРасплывчатая фраза; ограничивает Lexical Resource for a family wedding. When we arrived, there were so many people that we canОшибка времени: должно быть «could» not walk fast. Some sellers were shouting, some customers were arguing about the good priceПростая формулировка; «a fair price» точнее, and motorbikes were, erСлово-паразит, заминка, passing in the narrow lanes between the stalls. We stopped two times to rest in a doorway, and a man carryОшибка формы: должно быть «carrying» a big bundle of cloth on his head shouted at everybody to move. I was holding my sister’s hand all the time because I was afraid we would lose each other. Most people were buying or selling, and some of them were just look aroundОшибка формы: должно быть «looking around» without buying anything. Honestly, I did not like it very much. It was too noisy, the air was hot, and I haveОшибка времени: должно быть «had» a headache after one hour. But my sister was happy because she findОшибка времени: должно быть «found» the dress that she wanted, so I was happy for her too. After that we had a cold drink in a small cafe outside the market, and the quiet there felt very goodПростая фраза; ограничивает Lexical Resource. I think I disliked the place because I am a person who likes quiet, but I understand that a lot of peopleПростая фраза; ограничивает Lexical Resource love this kind of market because, you knowСлово-паразит, используемое как заминка, it is full of life.

Band 7

I’d like to talk about a really crowded place I went to last December, Balogun Market in Lagos. I went on a Saturday morning with my younger sister Chidinma, who needed an outfit for a family wedding. By the time we arrived, the lanes were so packed that we could only shuffle alongЕстественный, точный глагол для передвижения в толпе with everyone else. Sellers were calling out to customers, shoppers were bargaining loudly, and every few minutes a motorbike squeezeОшибка времени: должно быть «squeezed» past between the stalls. We stopped twice to catch our breath in a doorway, and a man carrying a huge bundle of cloth on his head shouted at everybody to make way. I kept hold of my sister’s hand because I was afraid we’d get separated. Most people were there to buy or sell somethingЧёткое, правильное предложение, отвечающее на третий пункт, though some were simply wandering around and taking it all in. To be honest, I didn’t enjoy it much. It was far too noisy, the air was stifling, and I had a headache within an hour. Still, my sister was delightedСлово противопоставления сохраняет связность рассказа because she found exactly the dress she wanted, and that made the trip worthwhile. Afterwards we had a cold drink in a small cafe outside the market, and the quiet there felt wonderful. I think I disliked it mainly because I prefer quiet places, although I can understand why so many people is attractedОшибка согласования: должно быть «are attracted» to a market that’s so full of energy.

Band 8

I’d like to talk about a market I visited last December, Balogun Market in Lagos, which is easily the most crowded place I’ve ever been to. I went on a Saturday morning with my younger sister Chidinma, who needed an outfit for a family wedding. By the time we arrived, the lanes were so packed that all we could do was let the crowd carry us alongИдиоматичная, яркая формулировка для передвижения в толпе. Sellers were calling out to passers-by, shoppers were haggling at the top of their voices, and every few minutes a motorbike squeezed through the gaps between the stalls. We had to stop twice to catch our breath in a doorway, and a man balancing a huge bundle of cloth on his head barked at everybody to make way. I kept hold of my sister’s hand for fear of getting separated. Although most people were simply there to buy or sell, others were wandering about and soaking it all inУступительная конструкция употреблена точно и естественно. To be honest, I didn’t enjoy it. The noise was relentless, the air was stifling, and within an hour I had a pounding headache. That saidВводное слово, подводящее к взвешенной оценке, my sister was delighted to find exactly the dress she’d been looking for, which made the trip worthwhile. Afterwards we had a cold drink at a small cafe outside the market, and the sudden quiet felt like a luxury. I think I disliked it because I crave quietТочный, естественный выбор глагола, but I can see why so many people are drawn to a place that is so full of energy.