Describe a party for a special event that impressed you

Band 6

I would like to talk about a birthday party that really impressError de forma verbal: debería ser “impressed” me. It was held last August in the garden of my aunt’s house in Medellin, and it was for my grandmother’s eightieth birthday. It was a surprise, so she did not know anything about it. My cousins and I planError de tiempo verbal: debería ser “planned” it for two months, and, erVacilación natural, muletilla leve, my aunt cooked a lot of food. About sixty people came, and they were relatives, neighbours and some friends from my grandmother’s church. My aunt decorateError de tiempo verbal: debería ser “decorated” the garden with small lights and yellow flowers, because they are my grandmother’s favourite. We also hireError de tiempo verbal: debería ser “hired” a small band that played songs from her young days, and everybody danced, even the children. When she arrived, she was very surpriseError de forma: debería ser “was very surprised” and she started to cry. I was really happyExpresión básica; limita el Lexical Resource to see her face. After dinner we showed a slideshow with old photos of her, and my uncle makeError de tiempo verbal: debería ser “made” a speech about her life. It was a very nice speechVocabulario básico; “heartfelt speech” es más preciso and many people were crying. The party impressed me so much because my family worked hard for it, you knowMuletilla usada como marcador de vacilación, and everybody came from different cities only to say thank you to her. I never seeError de tiempo verbal: debería ser “had never seen” my family so united before. She told me later that it was the happiest day of her old age. I takeError de tiempo verbal: debería ser “took” many photos that night, and I still look at them when I want to feel happy. I think it was the best party in my life.

Band 7

I’d like to talk about a birthday party that really impressed me. It was held last August in the garden of my aunt’s house in Medellin, for my grandmother’s eightieth birthday. It was a surprise, so she had no idea about it. My cousins and I had been planning it for two months, and my aunt cooked enough food for a small army. About sixty people came: relatives, neighbours and a few friends from my grandmother’s church. My aunt had decorated the garden with fairy lights and yellow flowers, which are my grandmother’s favourite, and we’d hired a small band that played songs from her youth, so everybody danced, even the children. When she walked in she was so surpriseError de forma: debería ser “so surprised”, and she burst into tears. I was thrilledAdjetivo preciso y vívido to see her face. After dinner we showed a slideshow of old photos, and my uncle gave a heartfelt speechColocación natural about her life that left many people in tears. What impressed me most was how much effort everyone had put inLa oración hendida organiza la explicación con claridad, because relatives travelled from other cities just to thank her. I’d never seen my family so much unitedError de orden de palabras: debería ser “so united” before. She told me afterwards that it was the happiest day she’d had in years. I took dozens of photos that night, and I still look at them when I want to feel cheerful. I think it was the best party I’ve ever gone toError de colocación: debería ser “been to”.

Band 8

I’d like to talk about a birthday party that really impressed me. It was held last August in the garden of my aunt’s house in Medellin, for my grandmother’s eightieth birthday, and it was a surprise, so she had no idea. My cousins and I had been planning it for two months, and my aunt cooked enough food for a small army. About sixty people came: relatives, neighbours and a few friends from my grandmother’s church. My aunt had decorated the garden with fairy lights and yellow flowers, which are my grandmother’s favourite, and we’d hired a small band that played songs from her youth, so everybody danced, even the children. When she walked in she was completely taken aback, and then she burst into tears. I was thrilled to see her face. After dinner we showed a slideshow of old photos, and my uncle gave a heartfelt speech about her life that left many people in tears. What impressed me most was how much effort everyone had put in, since relatives had travelled from other cities just to thank herOración hendida más una cláusula de causa en Past Perfect, correcta en todo momento. I’d never seen my family pull togetherPhrasal verb idiomático like that before. She told me afterwards that it was the happiest day she’d had in years, and I took dozens of photos that night that I still look at whenever I want cheering up. I think it was the best party I’ve ever been to, not because it was lavish, but because it was so sincereUn contraste equilibrado cierra la respuesta con naturalidad.