Describe a time you went to a crowded place

Band 6

I would like to talk about a very crowded place I goError de tiempo verbal: debería ser “went” to last December, which was Balogun Market in Lagos. I went there on a Saturday morning with my younger sister Chidinma because she wanted to buy some nice clothesExpresión vaga; limita el Lexical Resource for a family wedding. When we arrived, there were so many people that we canError de tiempo verbal: debería ser “could” not walk fast. Some sellers were shouting, some customers were arguing about the good priceVocabulario básico; “a fair price” es más preciso, and motorbikes were, erVacilación natural, muletilla leve, passing in the narrow lanes between the stalls. We stopped two times to rest in a doorway, and a man carryError de forma: debería ser “carrying” a big bundle of cloth on his head shouted at everybody to move. I was holding my sister’s hand all the time because I was afraid we would lose each other. Most people were buying or selling, and some of them were just look aroundError de forma: debería ser “looking around” without buying anything. Honestly, I did not like it very much. It was too noisy, the air was hot, and I haveError de tiempo verbal: debería ser “had” a headache after one hour. But my sister was happy because she findError de tiempo verbal: debería ser “found” the dress that she wanted, so I was happy for her too. After that we had a cold drink in a small cafe outside the market, and the quiet there felt very goodVocabulario básico; limita el Lexical Resource. I think I disliked the place because I am a person who likes quiet, but I understand that a lot of peopleVocabulario básico; limita el Lexical Resource love this kind of market because, you knowMuletilla usada como marcador de vacilación, it is full of life.

Band 7

I’d like to talk about a really crowded place I went to last December, Balogun Market in Lagos. I went on a Saturday morning with my younger sister Chidinma, who needed an outfit for a family wedding. By the time we arrived, the lanes were so packed that we could only shuffle alongLocución verbal natural y precisa para moverse entre la multitud with everyone else. Sellers were calling out to customers, shoppers were bargaining loudly, and every few minutes a motorbike squeezeError de tiempo verbal: debería ser “squeezed” past between the stalls. We stopped twice to catch our breath in a doorway, and a man carrying a huge bundle of cloth on his head shouted at everybody to make way. I kept hold of my sister’s hand because I was afraid we’d get separated. Most people were there to buy or sell somethingOración clara y correcta que responde al tercer punto, though some were simply wandering around and taking it all in. To be honest, I didn’t enjoy it much. It was far too noisy, the air was stifling, and I had a headache within an hour. Still, my sister was delightedEl marcador de contraste mantiene la coherencia del relato because she found exactly the dress she wanted, and that made the trip worthwhile. Afterwards we had a cold drink in a small cafe outside the market, and the quiet there felt wonderful. I think I disliked it mainly because I prefer quiet places, although I can understand why so many people is attractedError de concordancia sujeto-verbo: debería ser “are attracted” to a market that’s so full of energy.

Band 8

I’d like to talk about a market I visited last December, Balogun Market in Lagos, which is easily the most crowded place I’ve ever been to. I went on a Saturday morning with my younger sister Chidinma, who needed an outfit for a family wedding. By the time we arrived, the lanes were so packed that all we could do was let the crowd carry us alongExpresión idiomática y vívida para moverse entre la multitud. Sellers were calling out to passers-by, shoppers were haggling at the top of their voices, and every few minutes a motorbike squeezed through the gaps between the stalls. We had to stop twice to catch our breath in a doorway, and a man balancing a huge bundle of cloth on his head barked at everybody to make way. I kept hold of my sister’s hand for fear of getting separated. Although most people were simply there to buy or sell, others were wandering about and soaking it all inEstructura concesiva usada con precisión y naturalidad. To be honest, I didn’t enjoy it. The noise was relentless, the air was stifling, and within an hour I had a pounding headache. That saidMarcador discursivo que introduce una visión equilibrada, my sister was delighted to find exactly the dress she’d been looking for, which made the trip worthwhile. Afterwards we had a cold drink at a small cafe outside the market, and the sudden quiet felt like a luxury. I think I disliked it because I crave quietVerbo preciso y natural, but I can see why so many people are drawn to a place that is so full of energy.