Describe an advertisement with a famous person in it

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I would like to describe an advertisement for a mint tea brand with a famous actor in it. The actor is well known in Morocco because he playSubject-verb agreement error: should be “plays” a detective in a TV series that many families watch together. I live in Casablanca, and I seeTense slip: should be “saw” the advert first on television in the evenings last Ramadan, and after that on a big billboard near the Corniche when I was going to the beach with my friends. It was a hot day and the billboard was very big. In the advert the actor comes into a small kitchen, and his grandmother gives him a glass of tea. He don’t sayAgreement error: should be “He doesn’t say” anything, he only smiles, and then a short song starts. The song is very niceBasic adjective; limits Lexical Resource and easy to remember, and my little brother sings it at home. The advert is only thirty seconds long, but I can remember every part of it. I like this advert because it is funny and warm, and it makes me think about my own grandmother, you knowFiller phrase used as a hesitation marker. The actor is also a person I really like, so I watch the advert every time. But I do not believe the tea is really his favourite, because he is an actor and, erNatural hesitation marker, minor filler, it is his job. I buyedIrregular verb error: should be “bought” the tea once because of the advert, but it was just a normal teaVague noun phrase; limits Lexical Resource. So for me it is more a nice little story than real information.

Band 7

I’d like to describe an advertisement for a mint tea brand with a famous actor in it. He’s well known in Morocco because he plays a detective in a TV series that many families watch together. I live in Casablanca, and I first saw the advert on television in the evenings last Ramadan, and later on a huge billboard near the Corniche while I was going to the beach with my friends, on a hot afternoon when it was impossible to miss. In the advert the actor walks into a small kitchen, and his grandmother hands him a glass of tea. He doesn’t saysVerb form error: should be “doesn’t say” a word, he just smiles, and then a short song begins. The tune is really catchyNatural collocation instead of a basic adjective, and my little brother sings it around the house. The advert lasts only thirty seconds, but I can remember every detail. What I like about it is that it’s funny and warm, and it reminds me of my own grandmother. I’m also a fan of the actor, so I tend to watch it whenever it comes on. That said, I don’t really believeDiscourse marker that introduces a reservation the tea is his favourite, because endorsing it is part of his job. I bought the tea once because of the advert, but it was perfectly ordinaryPrecise wording for a mild disappointment. So to me it’s less a source of information than a nice little storyComparative structure used accurately, although it does stick in my mind.

Band 8

I’d like to describe an advertisement for a mint tea brand featuring a famous actor, who is a household name in Morocco because he plays a detective in a TV series that whole families watch together. I live in Casablanca, and I first saw the advert on television in the evenings last Ramadan, and later on a huge billboard near the Corniche, as I was heading to the beach with friends on a hot afternoon, when it was impossible to miss. In the advert the actor walks into a small kitchen, and his grandmother hands him a glass of tea. He doesn’t say a word; he simply smiles, and then a short jingle begins. The tune is irresistibly catchyPrecise collocation, and my little brother sings it around the house. The advert lasts only thirty seconds, but I can recall every detail. What I like about it is that it’s tongue-in-cheek and warm at the same timePrecise, natural description of tone, and it reminds me of my own grandmother. I’m a fan of the actor, too, so I tend to watch it whenever it comes on. At the same time, I try not to be taken inDiscourse marker with a precise idiom for a reservation: I doubt the tea is really his favourite, since endorsing it is part of his job. I bought it once because of the advert, and it turned out to be nothing more than perfectly ordinary teaAccurate quantifier phrase. So I treat the advert as a nice little story rather than real informationPrecise paraphrase that completes the opinion, even though it clearly sticks in my mind.