Describe a person who works for a successful company

Band 6

I would like to talk about my neighbour Marta, who lives in the flat below mine in Porto, in Portugal. I know her sinceTense and preposition error: should be “have known her for” five years, and in the morning we often take the same metro, so we have a lot of time to chat. She tells me about her day, so I know a lot about her work. She works as a project coordinator for a company that makes and installs solar panels for houses and schools. Her job is, erNatural hesitation marker, minor filler, to plan the days when the workers come, to talk to the customers and to make sure the teams hasSubject-verb agreement error: should be “have” all the materials. She likes it most when a school switches on its new panels and the children are excited. The company is not very old. Two engineers started it about fifteen years ago in a small workshop in Braga, and now it has offices in four cities. I think the company is successful for three reasons. First, it is very reliableBasic phrase; limits Lexical Resource, because the workers finish the job on the day they promise. Second, the customers are happy, so they tell their friends and the company gets many new customersVague phrase; “a growing customer base” is more precise. Third, the company teaches its employees new things, so people staysSubject-verb agreement error: should be “stay” there for many years. Marta told me that last year the company openTense slip: should be “opened” an office in the south of the country. You knowFiller phrase used as a hesitation marker, I admire her because she works hard but she is never stressWord form error: should be “stressed”. Maybe one day I will work for a company like this.

Band 7

I’d like to talk about my neighbour Marta, who lives in the flat below mine in Porto, in Portugal. I’ve known her for about five years, and we often take the same metro in the morning, so we have plenty of time to chat. She often tells me about her day, so I know quite a lot about her work. She works as a project coordinator for a company that makes and installs solar panels for houses and schools. Her job is to plan the days when the installation teams visit, to liaise withPrecise work-related phrasal verb customers and to make sure everyone has the materials they need. She enjoys it most when a school switches on its new panels and the children are excited. The company isn’t very old: two engineers founded it about fifteen years ago in a small workshop in Braga, and it now has offices in four cities. I think it’s successful for three reasons. Firstly, it’s dependablePrecise adjective in place of “very reliable”, because the teams finish the job on the day they promise. Secondly, customers are so satisfied that they recommend it to their friends”so … that” result clause used accurately, which brings in new work. Thirdly, the company invests in training its employees, so people tend to stay for many years. Marta told me that last year it opened a new office in the south of the country, which wereSubject-verb agreement error: should be “which was” quite a big step. On the wholeDiscourse marker introduces a summing-up, I admire her because she works hard yet never seems stressed, and I can imagine myself working for a company like that one day.

Band 8

I’d like to talk about my neighbour Marta, who lives in the flat below mine in Porto, in Portugal. I’ve known her for about five years, and since we often take the same metro in the morning, we’ve had plenty of chances to chat. She often tells me about her day, so I know quite a lot about her work. She works as a project coordinator for a company that designs and installs solar panels for houses and schools. Her role is to schedule the installation teams, keep customers informed and make sure everyone has the materials they need. She enjoys it most when a school switches on its new panels and the children are excited. The company isn’t old: two engineers founded it about fifteen years ago in a small workshop in Braga, and it now has offices in four cities. I’d say it owes its success to three things. First, it’s thoroughly dependablePrecise intensifier plus adjective: the teams finish the job on the day they promise. Second, satisfied customers recommend it to their friends, which keeps new work coming inRelative clause referring to a whole idea, used accurately. Third, the company invests in training its employees, so staff tend to stay for yearsNatural, compact phrasing. Marta told me that last year it opened an office in the south of the country, a step that would have seemed risky ten years agoPast modal construction adds a flexible comparison. Overall, I admire her because she works hard yet never seems stressed, and I could easily picture myself working for a company like that one day.