Describe an enjoyable evening you had with friends

Band 6

I would like to describe an evening I had with my friends after our final exams last year. My friend Ploy organised it, and she chooseTense slip: should be “chose” a restaurant next to the river in Chiang Mai. There were six of us, and we wasSubject-verb agreement error: should be “were” all very tired from studying, so everybody wanted to relax. For dinner we ate grilled fish, papaya salad and sticky rice, and the food was, erNatural hesitation marker, minor filler, very deliciousBasic vocabulary; limits Lexical Resource. We drank iced tea and lime soda because nobody wanted anything strong. After the meal we talked for a long time about our school days, and we rememberTense slip: should be “remembered” funny things that our teachers did. We also talked about our plans for the future, like which university we will goTense error: should be “would go” to. You knowFiller phrase used as a hesitation marker, I did not look at my phone one time, and nobody else did, which is very rareBasic vocabulary; limits Lexical Resource for us. Ploy also surprised us with a small cake, because one of our friends had just got a place at university, and somebody at the next table played a guitar and the whole restaurant clapped. I think the evening was so enjoyable for two reasons. First, the exams were finished, so we felt more relaxed that usualComparison error: should be “more relaxed than usual”. Second, I had not seen some of my friends for a long time, and it was good to laugh together again. We stayed until the restaurant closed, we took one photo together on the way out, and I went home happy.

Band 7

I’d like to describe an evening I had with my friends after our final exams last year. My friend Ploy organised it, and she chose a restaurant right next to the riverPast simple with a precise prepositional phrase in Chiang Mai. There were six of us, and we were all exhausted from studying, so everybody was desperate to unwindPrecise phrase for a strong need. For dinner we had grilled fish, papaya salad and sticky rice, and the food was absolutely mouth-wateringVivid, precise adjective. We drank iced tea and lime soda, because nobody wanted anything strong. After the meal we talked for hours about our school days, and we reminisced forPreposition error: should be “reminisced about” the funny things our teachers used to do. We also talked about our plans, such as which university we’d go to. What struck me wasNatural discourse marker introducing a reflection that I didn’t check my phone once, and neither did anyone else, which is quite rare for us. Ploy also surprised us with a small cake, because one of our friends had just got a place at university, and somebody at the next table played a guitar and the whole restaurant clapped. I think the evening was so enjoyable for two reasons. Firstly, the exams were over, so we felt more relaxed than usual. Secondly, I hadn’t seen some of my friends since agesPreposition error: should be “for ages”, and it was lovely to laugh together again. We stayed until the restaurant closed, we took one photo together on the way out, and I went home feeling really happy.

Band 8

I’d like to describe an evening I had with my friends after our final exams last year. My friend Ploy organised it and chose a restaurant right next to the river in Chiang Mai. There were six of us, and we were all exhausted from studying, so everybody was desperate to unwind. For dinner we had grilled fish, papaya salad and sticky rice, and the food was absolutely mouth-watering. We drank iced tea and lime soda, since nobody was in the mood for anything strong. After the meal we talked for hours, reminiscing about our school days and laughing at the things our teachers used to doParticiple clause and “used to” combined accurately. We also talked about our plans, such as which university we’d go to. What struck me wasNatural discourse marker introducing a reflection that I didn’t check my phone once, and neither did anyone else, which is almost unheard of for us. Ploy also surprised us with a small cake, because one of our friends had just got a place at university, and somebody at the next table played a guitar and the whole restaurant clapped. If you’d asked me beforehand, I’d have called it just another dinnerThird conditional used accurately, but it turned out to be one of the best nights of that year. There were two reasons. For one thing, the pressure of the exams had lifted, so we were more relaxed than usual. For another, I hadn’t seen some of my friends for ages, and it felt wonderful to be properly together againNatural, warm phrasing for reconnecting. We lost track of timeNatural idiom and stayed until the restaurant closed, we took one photo together on the way out, and I went home feeling lighter than I had in months.