Describe a new law you would like to see introduced

Band 6

I would like to talk about a law that I want in my country: everybody who rideLỗi hoà hợp chủ ngữ – động từ: phải là “rides” an electric scooter must wear a helmet and use the cycle lanes. The idea comeLỗi thì: phải là “came” to me last spring, when a man on a scooter without helmet went across the road near my university and almost hit a bus. He was okay, but I can not stopLỗi thì: phải là “could not stop” thinking that it could be much worse. In my city these scooters are very popularCách diễn đạt cơ bản, hạn chế Lexical Resource for students and delivery riders, but the rules are not erTừ ngập ngừng tự nhiên, từ đệm không đáng kể ready for this. The law would apply for riders of every age and also for the companies that give the scooters, because they must give helmets and explain the rules at the beginning. The government should also run a short campaign before the law starts, so that people hear about it first. I think it is goodTính từ cơ bản, hạn chế Lexical Resource for the country, because fewer accidents means less problemsLỗi hoà hợp và danh từ đếm được: phải là “fewer accidents mean fewer problems” for hospitals, and a small change like this can protectThiếu “would”: phải là “would protect” a lot of people, especially students, who ride very fast near the university gates.

Band 7

I’d like to talk about a law I’d introduce in my country: a rule that everyone riding an electric scooter must wear a helmet and keep to the cycle lanes. The idea came to me last spring, when a rider with no helmet swerved across the road outside my university and narrowly missed a busCollocation chính xác, tự nhiên. He was fine, but I couldn’t stop thinking about how easily it could have gone the other way. In my city these scooters have become very popular in a couple of years, mostly among students and delivery riders, and the rules haven’t really caught up with themThì hiện tại hoàn thành kèm phrasal verb mang tính thành ngữ. The law would apply to riders of every age and to the companies that provide the scooters, who would have complyThiếu “to”: phải là “have to comply” with it by giving out helmets and explaining the rules. The government should also run a short campaign before the law starts, so that people hear about it first. I think it would benefit the whole countryTừ đánh dấu ý kiến rõ ràng, trả lời dòng explain, because fewer accidents mean less pressure on hospitals, and it’s a small change that could protect many people.

Band 8

I’d like to talk about a law I’d introduce in my country: a rule that everyone riding an electric scooter must wear a helmet and keep to the cycle lanes. The idea came to me last spring, when a rider with no helmet swerved across the road outside my university and narrowly missed a bus. He was fine, but I couldn’t stop thinking about how easily it could have gone the other way. In my city these scooters have become hugely popular in just a couple of years, mostly among students and delivery riders, and the rules haven’t really caught up. The law would apply to riders of every age and to the companies that provide the scooters, who would have to give out helmets and explain the rules when someone first uses one. The government should also run a short campaign before the law starts, so that people hear about it first. It would benefit the whole country, not only the ridersCấu trúc đối lập nêu lợi ích rõ ràng, because fewer accidents mean less pressure on hospitals and fewer drivers who have to live with a near miss. Frankly, it’s a small change that would protect a lot of peopleCâu kết tự nhiên, tự tin.