Describe a piece of local news that people were interested in

Band 6

I would like to talk about a piece of local news from my city, Kumasi, in Ghana. Last year the city opened a new footbridge over a very busy road near my school, and the whole area was very happyПростое выражение; ограничивает Lexical Resource about it. I hearОшибка времени: должно быть «heard» the news first on the radio in my uncle Kofi’s shop, and after that I saw many posts about it on the internet. The mayor sayОшибка времени: должно быть «said» that the old bridge had been closed for years after the damage, and the builders finished the new one in six months. A lot of residents had signed a petition for it, and some schoolchildren were at the opening with their teachers. The opening was short, but a band played music and many people took photos on the new bridge. The traders who sell fruit near the road were also happy, because more people now walk past their tables. I think people were very interested because the bridge is makeОшибка формы глагола: должно быть «made» life easier. Before that, erЕстественная заминка, некритичное слово-паразит, children had to cross the road with the cars and it was very dangerousПростое выражение; ограничивает Lexical Resource, and the other way was a long walk. Now people savesОшибка согласования подлежащего и сказуемого: должно быть «save» about thirty minutes every day. Also, many people wasОшибка согласования подлежащего и сказуемого: должно быть «were» waiting for this news for a long time, so it was not only a bridge for them. You knowФраза-филлер, используемая как пауза для раздумья, for a week everybody was talking about it at home and in the market.

Band 7

I’d like to talk about a piece of local news from my city, Kumasi, in Ghana. Last year the city opened a new footbridge over a very busy road near my school, and the whole neighbourhood was delighted. I first heard the news on the radio in my uncle Kofi’s shop, and after that I saw a lot of posts about it online. The mayor announced that the old bridge had been closed for years after it was damaged, and the builders finished the new one in just six months. Many residents had signed a petition for it, and some schoolchildren attended the opening with their teachers. The ceremony was short, but a band played and many people took photos on the new bridge. The traders who sell fruit beside the road were pleased too, because more people now walk past their stalls. I think people were so interested because it made a real difference to daily lifeЕстественное словосочетание. Before that, children had to cross the road between the cars, which was dangerous enough for makeОшибка в управлении глагола: должно быть «enough to make» или «so dangerous that it made» parents anxious, and the alternative was a long walk. Now people save about thirty minutes a day, which matters a lot to students and workers. There was also the feeling that a long-awaited decision had finally been takenСтрадательный залог с точным причастием, so it meant more than a bridge to them. For a weekОбстоятельство времени возвращает заключительную мысль к рассказу, it was the talk of the town, at home and in the market.

Band 8

I’d like to talk about a piece of local news from my city, Kumasi, in Ghana. Last year the city opened a new footbridge over a very busy road near my school, and the whole neighbourhood was delighted. I first heard the news on the radio in my uncle Kofi’s shop, and later I saw a flood of posts about it online. The mayor announced that the old bridge had been closed for years after it was damaged, and the builders completed the new one in just six months. Many residents had signed a petition for it, and some schoolchildren attended the opening with their teachers. The ceremony was brief, but a band played and crowds took photographs on the new bridge. The traders who sell fruit beside the road were pleased too, since far more people now pass their stalls. I think people were so interested because it made a tangible difference to daily lifeТочное, естественное словосочетание. Before that, children had to weave between the cars to cross the road, which was dangerous enough to leave many parents anxiousСложная группа прилагательного с инфинитивом, and the alternative was a long detour. Now people save about thirty minutes a day. There was also a sense that a long-awaited decision had finally been acted onСтрадательный залог с точным причастием, so it meant far more than a bridge to them. For a week or soЕстественное неопределённое указание времени сохраняет разговорный регистр, it was the talk of the town, at home and in the market.