Describe a person who is famous in your local area

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I would like to describe Lucia Mamani, a cook who is famous in Arequipa, the city in southern Peru where I live. She has a small traditional restaurant near my district, and every Sunday she haveОшибка согласования подлежащего и сказуемого: должно быть «has» a short programme on the local radio, where she explains old recipes from our region. She opened the restaurant twenty years ago, after she workОшибка времени: должно быть «worked» in her aunt’s kitchen as a girl. People like her for some reasons. First, her food is very tastyПростая лексика; ограничивает Lexical Resource and it tasteОшибка согласования подлежащего и сказуемого: должно быть «tastes» like the dishes our grandmothers made. Second, she is not proud, you knowФраза-паразит, используемая как заминка, she comes out of the kitchen and says hello to every customer. I remember last year my family goОшибка времени: должно быть «went» there for my mother’s birthday, and she rememberОшибка времени: должно быть «remembered» my grandmother’s name, which surprised us a lot. There is also a queue outside the restaurant at lunch, and some tourists even come from Lima to try her good soupРасплывчатое прилагательное; более точное слово улучшило бы предложение. She also teaches young people from the neighbourhood to cook, erЕстественная заминка, некритичное слово-паразит, so they can find a job. Last month a journalist from a national newspaper wrote about her, and now more people know her name. When I eat her food, I feel connected with my family and my history. I feel proud that she is from my city, and I am respectingГлагол состояния в продолженном времени: должно быть «respect» her because she keeps our traditions alive. She is a very goodПростое прилагательное; ограничивает Lexical Resource person and I would like to learn from her one day.

Band 7

I’d like to describe Lucia Mamani, a cook who’s a household name in Arequipa, the city in southern Peru where I live. She runs a small traditional restaurant near my district, and every Sunday she has a short slot on the local radio, where she explains old recipes from our region. She opened the restaurant twenty years ago, after working in her aunt’s kitchen as a girl. There are several reasons why people are so fond of her. First, her food tastes exactly like the dishes our grandmothers used to makeЕстественное употребление «used to» для привычки в прошлом. Second, she’s completely down to earthРаспространённое словосочетание, естественно поставленное: she comes out of the kitchen to greet every customer. Last year my family went there for my mother’s birthday, and she remembered my grandmother’s name, which took us all by surpriseИдиоматичное выражение в правильном времени. There’s often a queue outside at lunchtime, and some tourists even travel from Lima just to try her soup. She also trains young people from the neighbourhood, so they can find work in kitchens. Last month a journalist from a national newspaper wrote a piece about her, so her name is now spreading beyond the city. When I eat her food, I feel connected to my family and to our history. I feel proud that she comes from my city, and I respect her because she keeps our traditions alive. It give meОшибка согласования: должно быть «It gives me» the feeling that a small business can matter to a whole community, and I’d love to learn from her one day.

Band 8

I’d like to describe Lucia Mamani, a cook who is something of a household name in Arequipa, the city in southern Peru where I live. She runs a small traditional restaurant near my district, and every Sunday she has a short slot on the local radio, where she explains old recipes from our region. She opened it twenty years ago, having learned the trade in her aunt’s kitchen as a girl. There are several reasons why people are so fond of her. For one thing, her food tastes just like the dishes our grandmothers used to make. For another, she is so unassuming that she comes out of the kitchen to greet every customerПридаточное следствия, показывающее владение сложной структурой. Last year my family went there for my mother’s birthday, and she remembered my grandmother’s name, which took us all by surpriseИдиоматичное выражение, использованное естественно. There’s often a queue outside at lunchtime, and some tourists even travel from Lima for a bowl of her soup. She also trains young people from the neighbourhood, which gives them a foot in the door of local kitchensПридаточное определительное, дающее дополнительную информацию, с идиомой. Last month a journalist from a national newspaper profiled her, and her name is now travelling well beyond the city. Every time I eat her food, I feel connected to my family and to a shared history. I feel proud that she comes from my city, and I admire her because she keeps our traditions alive. What strikes me most, I think,Дискурсивный маркер, вводящий взвешенное мнение is that she has shown how a small business can become part of a whole community’s identity, and I’d love to learn from her one day.