Describe a person you know who likes taking photos

Band 6

I would like to describe my friend Sita, who comeОшибка согласования подлежащего и сказуемого: должно быть «comes» from Pokhara in Nepal and loves taking photos. We met in the first year of university, when I joined the photography club because I wantОшибка времени: должно быть «wanted» to try something new. On the first day I forgot my camera battery, and she lent me her spare one, so we started to talk and soon we became close friends. She takes photos almost everywhere, but her favourite place is Phewa Lake in the early morning, when the mountains are reflected in the water and the lake is, erЕстественная заминка, некритичное слово-паразит, very quiet. She tellОшибка времени: должно быть «told» me once that she waits for forty minutes in the cold just to get the light she wants. She also goes on mountain trails with her camera, and during festivals she walks around the streets and takes pictures of nice thingsРасплывчатая простая именная группа; ограничивает Lexical Resource like lamps and dancers. Last autumn she gave me a small print of the lake, and it is on my desk now. She does not like to pose in pictures herself, she is always behind of the cameraОшибка в предлоге: должно быть «behind the camera». She also teaches me how to hold the camera and how to think about the picture before pressing the button. You knowФраза-паразит, используемая как заминка, before I met her I never lookОшибка времени: должно быть «never looked» at small details, but now I notice them. I feel very thankfulПростое прилагательное; «indebted» или «grateful for her influence» оценили бы выше to her because she showed me that a simple moment can be very beautifulПростая лексика; ограничивает Lexical Resource, and I think she will always be my close friend.

Band 7

I’d like to describe my friend Sita, who comes from Pokhara in Nepal and loves taking photos. We met in the first year of university, when I joined the photography club because I wanted to try something new. On the first day I forgot my camera battery, and she lent me her spare one, so we started talking and soon became close friends. She photographs almost everywhere, but her favourite place is Phewa Lake in the early morning, when the mountains are reflected in the water and the whole lake is perfectly stillТочное сочетание наречия и прилагательного в сочинённом предложении. She told me once that she’ll wait forty minutes in the cold just to get the light she wants. She also goes on mountain trails with her camera, and during festivals she wanders through the streets capturing lamps, dancers and street foodКонкретная деталь вместо общей фразы. Last autumn she gave me a small print of the lake, and it’s on my desk now. She doesn’t like posing herself, so she’s usually behind of the cameraОшибка в предлоге: должно быть «behind the camera». She also teaches me how to hold the camera and how to think about the picture before pressing the button, and she is extremely patient with beginners like me. Before I met her I never really paid attention to small detailsЕстественное словосочетание, but now I notice them everywhere. I feel very grateful to her because she showed me that an ordinary moment can be worth keepingЕстественная краткая фраза, избегающая простого прилагательного, and I think we’ll stay friends for many years.

Band 8

I’d like to describe my friend Sita, who comes from Pokhara in Nepal and has a real passion for photography. We met in the first year of university, when I joined the photography club because I wanted to try something new. On the first day I forgot my camera battery, and she lent me her spare one, so we got talking and soon became close friends. She photographs almost everywhere, but her favourite spot is Phewa Lake at dawn, when the mountains are reflected in the water and the whole lake is perfectly stillТочное сочетание наречия и прилагательного в сочинённом предложении. She once told me that she’ll happily wait forty minutes in the cold to get exactly the light she wants. She also heads out on mountain trails with her camera, and during festivals she wanders through the streets capturing lamps, dancers and street food. Last autumn she gave me a small print of the lake, which now sits on my desk. She hates posing herself, so she’s nearly always behind the camera. She has also taught me to hold the camera properly and to think about the picture before pressing the button. Before I met her I’d never really paid attention to small detailsЕстественное словосочетание, whereas now I notice them everywhere. I feel enormously grateful to her, because she showed me that an ordinary moment can be worth keepingКонструкция косвенной речи с модальным глаголом, использованная точно, and looking backЕстественный дискурсивный маркер, вводящий размышление, that club meeting was one of the luckiest accidents of my university life.