Describe a person you know who would like to work in the medical field

Band 6

I would like to talk about my cousin Selam, who lives in Addis Ababa in Ethiopia. Our mothers are sisters, so I know herใช้ tense ผิด ต้องเป็น “have known her” all my life, and we wasประธานกับกริยาไม่สอดคล้องกัน ต้องเป็น “were” together every school holiday when we were small. She wants to become a children’s doctor, a, erหยุดคิดอย่างเป็นธรรมชาติ คำเติมไม่รบกวน, paediatrician. Now she studyใช้ tense ผิด ต้องเป็น “is studying” hard for her final school exams because she hopes to go to medical school. On Saturdays she also helps at a small clinic near her house, where she gives out forms and plays with the children in the waiting room. Sometimes I visit her there, and I can see that the children really trust her. She started to think about this career when she was twelve years old. Her little brother Dawit had a high fever and stayed in hospital for one week. Selam sitใช้ tense ผิด ต้องเป็น “sat” next to his bed every afternoon, and she saw a young doctor who talked to Dawit very gently and made him laugh. After that day she told everybody that she will beใช้ tense ผิดใน reported speech ต้องเป็น “would be” a doctor like him. I think she wants this career for two reasons. First, she is very good at scienceวลีพื้นฐาน จำกัดคะแนน Lexical Resource, especially biology. Second, she wants to help people, and in my country doctors get big respectคำที่ใช้คู่กันไม่แม่นยำ “a great deal of respect” เป็นธรรมชาติกว่า. You knowคำเติมที่ใช้เป็นเครื่องหมายหยุดคิด, she is also very patient personขาดคำนำหน้านาม ต้องเป็น “a very patient person”, so I am sure she will be a good doctor. I am proud of her, and her plan makes me think about my own future, because I do not have a clear idea yet.

Band 7

I’d like to talk about my cousin Selam, who lives in Addis Ababa in Ethiopia. Our mothers are sisters, so I’ve known her all my life, and we spent every school holiday together when we were small. She’d like to become a paediatrician, which means a doctor for children. At the moment she’s working hard for her final school exams so that she can apply to medical schoolประโยคบอกจุดประสงค์ที่ใช้ “so that” ได้ถูกต้อง. On Saturdays she also helps at a small clinic near her house, where she gives out forms and plays with the children in the waiting room. Sometimes I visit her there, and I can see that the children really trust her. She first started to think about this career when she was twelve. Her little brother Dawit had a high fever and spent a week in hospital, and Selam sat beside his bed every afternoon. She noticed a young doctor who spoke to Dawit very gently and even made him laugh, and from that day she told everybody she was going to be a doctor like heใช้รูปสรรพนามผิด ต้องเป็น “like him”. I think there are two reasons behind her choice. Firstly, she’s gifted at scienceคำคุณศัพท์ที่แม่นยำแทน “very good”, biology especially. Secondly, she genuinely wants to help people, and on top of thatวลีเชื่อมที่ช่วยให้คำอธิบายเป็นระเบียบ doctors are highly respected where we live. I’m proud of her, and I’m sure she’ll be a good doctor because she’s remarkably patientคำขยายที่เป็นธรรมชาติกับคำคุณศัพท์ที่แม่นยำ, even with difficult people. Her plan also makes me think about my own future, because I don’t have such a clear idea yet.

Band 8

I’d like to talk about my cousin Selam, who lives in Addis Ababa in Ethiopia. Our mothers are sisters, so I’ve known her all my life, and we spent every school holiday together as children. She hopes to become a paediatrician, and she’s currently working hard for her final school exams so that she can apply to medical school. On Saturdays she also helps at a small clinic near her house, where she gives out forms and plays with the children in the waiting room. Whenever I visit her there, it’s obvious that the children trust her. The idea first took hold when she was about twelveวิธีบอกจุดเริ่มต้นแบบสำนวน. Her little brother Dawit had a high fever and spent a week in hospital, and Selam sat beside his bed every afternoon. She noticed a young doctor who spoke to Dawit very gently and even made him laugh, and from that day she told everybody she was going to be a doctor like him. I think there are two reasons behind her choice. For one thing, she has a real gift for scienceคำที่มักใช้คู่กันตามธรรมชาติ แทน “is good at”, biology in particular. For another, she genuinely wants to help people, children above all, and, as a bonus, doctors are highly respected where we live. I’m proud of her, and I’m convinced she’ll be a caring doctor, because she’s remarkably patient, even with people who are difficultวลีขยายท้ายประโยคช่วยให้ปิดท้ายได้แม่นยำและยืดหยุ่น. Honestly, her certainty makes me reflect on my own future, since I haven’t settled on a direction yet.