Describe a gift you would like to buy for a friend

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I would like to talk about a gift I want to buy for my friend Sevara, who moveОшибка времени: должно быть «moved» to Almaty last year to study for a master’s degree. She always sayОшибка согласования подлежащего и сказуемого: должно быть «says» that she wishes she could paint, but she was always too busy to start. So I will to buyОшибка формы глагола: должно быть «will buy» или «am going to buy» her a set of watercolours with a pad of paper and two goodПростое прилагательное; ограничивает Lexical Resource brushes, all in a wooden box for her desk. There is a small art shop near our old university, and the owner knows about this, so I ask him help meПропущены «to» и «will»: должно быть «will ask him to help me» choose the right ones, because I have no idea what a beginner needs. I will give it to her on her birthday in December, erЕстественная заминка, некритичное слово-паразит maybe when I visit her. I think she will be loveОшибка формы глагола: должно быть «will love» it, because it is not just a thing, it is a way to help herПростая формулировка; ограничивает Lexical Resource start something she always wanted, and I think she will be happy that I remembered what she said a long time ago, because many people forget these small things.

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I’d like to talk about a gift I’d love to buy for my friend Sevara, who moved to Almaty last year to start a master’s degree. For as long as I’ve known her, she has said she wishes she could paint, but she has always been too busy or too shy to begin. So I’m planning to give her a proper set of watercolours, together with a thick pad of paper and two soft brushes, in a wooden box she can keep on her desk. There’s a small art shop near our old university where the owner knows his materialsПридаточное определительное с точной подробностью, and I’d ask him to help me choose, since I really don’t know which paints does a beginner needОшибка порядка слов в косвенном вопросе: должно быть «which paints a beginner needs». I’d hand it over on her birthday in December, ideally in person. What I like about the idea is that it’s a gentle pushЕстественное идиоматичное выражение towards something she’s always wanted to try, and I think she’d be touched that I rememberedТочное эмоциональное словосочетание a casual comment from years ago. More than anything, I’d like her to feelЕстественный дискурсивный маркер, вводящий заключительную мысль that someone believes she can do it.

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I’d like to talk about a gift I’d love to buy for my friend Sevara, who moved to Almaty last year to start a master’s degree. For as long as I’ve known her, she has said she wishes she could paint, yet she has always been either too busy or too shy to begin. So I’m planning to give her a proper set of watercolours, along with a thick pad of paper and two soft brushes, in a wooden box she can keep on her desk. There’s a small art shop near our old university whose owner knows his materials, and I’d ask him to help me choose, since I wouldn’t have the faintest idea which paints suit a beginner. I’d hand it over on her birthday in December, ideally in person. What appeals to me about the idea is that it isn’t merely an objectРасщеплённое предложение с противопоставлением but a gentle push towards something she has always wanted to try, and I suspect she’d be touched that I remembered a throwaway comment from years ago. More than anything, I’d like her to feel that someone believes she can do it.