Describe a special cake you ate or made

Band 6

I would like to talk about a lemon cake with poppy seeds that my mother bakeError de tiempo verbal: debería ser “baked” for my graduation in July 2023. It is not normal for her, because she is a very good cook, but she cookError de concordancia sujeto-verbo: debería ser “cooks” only meat and rice and I never seeError de tiempo verbal: debería ser “saw” her make a cake in my life. After, I knowError de elección de verbo: debería ser “found out” that she tried three times in the last two weeks and the first cake was very blackExpresión básica; limita el Lexical Resource on the bottom. We ate it in our garden in the afternoon with my aunt, two cousins and my grandfather, and we wasError de concordancia sujeto-verbo: debería ser “we were” sitting at a table under the apricot tree. She put some thin pieces of lemon on top and a few mint leaves from the pot near the kitchen door. HonestlyMarcador discursivo natural que introduce un comentario personal, the cake was a little dry, but nobody said anything, and I remember she was very happyExpresión básica; limita el Lexical Resource when she brought it. It was special for me because of her effort and her nervous face, and on a day with many congratulations she wanted to say it in her own way.

Band 7

I’d like to talk about a lemon and poppy-seed cake that my mother baked for my graduation in July 2023. It isn’t something she would normally do: she’s an excellent cook, but she makes savoury food, and I’d never seen her bake a cake in my whole life. I found out afterwards that she’d practised three times in the previous fortnight and that the first attempt had come out almost black on the bottom. We ate it in our garden that afternoon, with my aunt, my two cousins and my grandfather gathered around a table under the apricot treeColocación natural y vívida, and she’d decorateError de forma verbal: debería ser “decorated” it with thin slices of lemon and a few mint leaves. To be honest, the cake was slightly dry, but nobody mentioned it, and I can still picture how proud she looked when she brought it out. It was special because it wasn’t really about the tasteEstructura contrastiva que introduce la razón but about the effort and nerves behind it, and I think, on a day full of congratulationsSintagma nominal natural, she wanted to say it her own way.

Band 8

I’d like to talk about a lemon and poppy-seed cake that my mother baked for my graduation in July 2023. It isn’t something she’d normally do: she’s an excellent cook, but her talent is for savoury food, and in all my life I’d never seen her bake a cake. I found out afterwards that she’d practised three times in the previous fortnight and that the first attempt had come out almost black on the bottom. We ate it in our garden that afternoon, with my aunt, my two cousins and my grandfather gathered around a table under the apricot tree, and she’d decorated it with thin slices of lemon and a few mint leaves. Honestly, the cake was slightly dry, but nobody mentioned it, and I can still picture how proud she looked when she brought it out. What made it special wasn’t the taste at all but the effort and the nerves behind itOración hendida con un contraste claro, and, on a day full of congratulations, she’d chosen to say it in a way that was entirely her own.