Describe a short journey you often take but dislike

Band 6

I would like to talk about a short journey that I often take but I dislike. It is the microbus ride from my home in Nasr City to my university in the centre of Cairo. It is only about twenty-five minutes when the road is clear, but I am doingErro de tempo verbal: deveria ser “do” it five days a week, usually at half past seven in the morning because my first lecture starts at nine. The problem is that at this time every microbus is very fullExpressão básica; limita o Lexical Resource, and I often have to stand with my bag between my knees. The driver plays loud music and driveErro de concordância: deveria ser “drives” very fast, and then he stops suddenly, so much peopleErro de substantivo contável: deveria ser “many people” fall on each other. There is also a big junction near the bridge where the cars never move, so we wait there for a long timeExpressão vaga; limita o Lexical Resource every day. I can not read or even to useErro de forma: deveria ser “even use” my phone, because there is no space, and sometimes I, erMuleta de linguagem usada como marcador de hesitação, feel sick. I usually put my earphones in and try to listen to a podcast, but the music and the horns are too loud, so I cannot follow anything. I tried the metro once, but it needs two changes and it takes longer, so I came back to the microbus. I dislike this journey mainly because it makes me tired before the day starts, and also because it is very badExpressão básica; limita o Lexical Resource to never know how long it will take. You knowMuleta de linguagem usada como marcador de hesitação, I hope I can find a flat near the university next year.

Band 7

I’d like to talk about a short journey I often make but really dislike. It’s the microbus ride from my home in Nasr City to my university in the centre of Cairo. It takes only about twenty-five minutes when the road is clear, but I do it five days a week, usually at half past seven in the morning, because my first lecture starts at nine. The problem is that at that time every microbus is packed to the roofCollocation vívida para um veículo muito lotado, and I often have to stand with my bag between my knees. The driver plays loud music and drives far too fast, then brakes suddenly, so passengers fall to each othersErro de forma: deveria ser “fall into each other”. There’s also a big junction near the bridge where the cars hardly move, so we sit there for agesExpressão informal e natural para uma espera longa every single day. I can’t read or even use my phone, because there’s no room, and sometimes I feel a bit sick. I usually put my earphones in and try to listen to a podcast, but between the music and the horns I can’t follow a single sentence. I tried the metro once, but it needs two changes and takes longer, so I go backErro de tempo verbal: deveria ser “went back” to the microbus. What I dislike most is that the journey tires me out before the day has even startedFrase clivada usada com precisão para dar ênfase, and I never know exactly how long it will take. I’m hoping to find a flat near the university next year.

Band 8

I’d like to talk about a short journey I make several times a week and really dislike: the microbus ride from my home in Nasr City to my university in the centre of Cairo. It takes only about twenty-five minutes when the road is clear, but I do it five days a week, usually at half past seven in the morning, because my first lecture starts at nine. The problem is that at that time every microbus is packed to the roof, and I often have to stand with my bag between my knees. The driver plays loud music and drives far too fast, then brakes without warning, so passengers topple into one anotherExpressão verbal precisa para um movimento brusco. There’s also a big junction near the bridge, a real bottleneck where the cars barely move, so we sit there for ages every single day. I can’t read or even use my phone, because there’s no room, and sometimes I feel slightly sick. I usually put my earphones in and try to listen to a podcast, but between the music and the horns I can’t follow a single sentence. I tried the metro once, but it needs two changes and takes longer, so I went back to the microbus. What bothers me most is that the journey wears me out before the day has even begun, and that I can never tell how long it will takeDuas orações com “that” em paralelo dentro de uma frase clivada, bem executadas. Honestly, I’m counting the months untilManeira idiomática e flexível de expressar uma esperança I can find a flat near the university.