Describe a happy event you organised

Band 6

I would like to talk about a surprise birthday party that I organise時制の誤り：正しくは「organised」 for my grandmother last August. She was turning seventy, and my cousins and I wanted to do something special for her. We held it in the garden of my uncle’s house, in the evening, because the weather was cooler. First, I wrote a long list of guests基本的な言い回しで、Lexical Resourceの評価が伸びない with my mother, and my cousins help時制の誤り：正しくは「helped」 me with the food and the decorations. The most difficult part was keeping it secret, because my grandmother always ask主語と動詞の不一致：正しくは「asks」 questions when she sees us whispering. We told her that we were just having a family dinner. My sister and I also put lights and paper flowers in the garden the afternoon before. On the day the cake arrived late, and I was a little nervous, but my uncle go時制の誤り：正しくは「went」 to collect it and it arrived before she did. When she came into the garden, everyone shouted “surprise” and she started to cry from happiness. Afterwards we sat together and looked at old photographs until midnight. I felt very proud and happy, and I think it was one of the best evenings of the year for my family.

Band 7

I’d like to talk about a surprise birthday party I organised for my grandmother last August. She was turning seventy, and my cousins and I wanted to do something special for her. We held it in the garden of my uncle’s house in the evening, when it was cooler. First I drew up a guest list with my mother句動詞を過去形で自然に使っている, and my cousins took care of the food and decorations的確なコロケーション. The hardest part was keeping it a secret, because my grandmother always asks questions when she sees us whispering, so we told her it was just a family dinner. My sister and I also hung lights and paper flowers around the garden the afternoon before. On the day, the cake arrived late and I started to panic, but my uncle went to collect it and it got there before she did. When she walked into the garden, everyone shouted “surprise” and she burst into tears of happiness. Afterwards we sat together and looked through old photographs until midnight. Looking back, what I felt most was relief and pride質問が求める振り返りを導く、話の流れを示す表現, because it have brought時制の形の誤り：正しくは「because it had brought」 the whole family together.

Band 8

I’d like to talk about a surprise birthday party I organised for my grandmother last August. She was turning seventy, and my cousins and I wanted to do something special for her. We held it in the garden of my uncle’s house in the evening, when it was cooler. First I drew up a guest list with my mother, and my cousins took care of the food and decorations. The hardest part was keeping it a secret, since my grandmother always asks questions when she catches us whispering, so we told her it was just a family dinner. My sister and I also hung lights and paper flowers around the garden the afternoon before. On the day, the cake arrived late and I started to panic, but my uncle went to collect it and it got there before she did. No sooner had she walked into the garden than everyone shouted “surprise”倒置構文で、重要な場面を強調している, and she burst into tears of happiness. Afterwards we sat together and looked through old photographs until midnight. Looking back, what I felt most was relief and pride, because it had brought the whole family together締めくくりの理由を述べる自然なコロケーション in a way that nothing else that year had.