Describe a place you would like to visit in your free time

Band 6

I would like to talk about Issyk-Kul, which is a big mountain lake in the north of Kyrgyzstan. I want visitПропущено «to»: должно быть «have wanted to visit» it since my uncle comeОшибка времени: должно быть «came» back from there with many photographs. It is a long journey from my city, so I goОшибка времени: должно быть «would go» by bus and then by taxi along the shore. I would stay for four days in a small guesthouse in a village, not in a bigПростое прилагательное; ограничивает Lexical Resource hotel. In the day I would walk on the beach, take a boat on the water and go to the mountains for a hike, and in the evening I sitОшибка времени: должно быть «I would sit» outside and look at the mountains. ErЕстественная заминка, некритичное слово-паразит, the reason I would like to go is that I work in a room with a computer all week and I want to be in a place where it is very quietПростая формулировка; ограничивает Lexical Resource. I also want to eat the food of the local families and talk with them, because I think it is the best part of a trip, and I think I will remember it for a long time after I come back home, even if the trip is not long.

Band 7

I’d like to talk about Issyk-Kul, a large mountain lake in the north of Kyrgyzstan, which I’ve wanted to visit ever since my uncle came back from there with a camera full of photographs. It’s a long journey from my city, so I’d probably go by bus and then by shared taxi along the shore. I’d plan to stay for four days in a small guesthouse in one of the villages rather than in a big resort. During the day I’d walkingОшибка формы глагола: должно быть «walk» along the beach, take a boat out onto the water and hike up a gorge, and in the evenings I’d just sit outside and watch the mountains turn pinkЯркий, точный образ. The main reason I’d like to go is thatЧёткий дискурсивный маркер, вводящий объяснение my weeks are spent in front of screens, and I’d love to get away from it all, somewhere where the loudest sound is the waterОпределительное придаточное, добавляющее точную картину. I’d also like to eat what local families eat and talk to them, because that’s the part of a trip I tend to remember longest, and I think a few days like that would do me a lot of good.

Band 8

I’d like to talk about Issyk-Kul, a large mountain lake in the north of Kyrgyzstan, which I’ve wanted to visit ever since my uncle came back from there with a camera full of photographs. It’s a long journey from my city, so I’d probably go by bus and then by shared taxi along the shore. I’d plan to stay for four days in a small guesthouse in one of the villages rather than in a big resort. During the day I’d walk along the beach, take a boat out onto the water and hike up one of the gorges behind the village, and in the evenings I’d simply sit outside and watch the mountains turn pink. What draws me there is the thought of a place where the loudest sound is the waterРасщеплённое предложение с относительным придаточным для акцента, since my weeks are spent in rooms full of screens. I’d also hope to eat what local families eat and talk to the people who live there, because that’s the part of a trip that stays with you longestЕстественное идиоматичное размышление.