Describe a successful business person you know

Band 6

I would like to talk about my uncle Rustam, who is my mother’s brother and own주어와 동사의 수 불일치: 올바른 형태는 “owns” a bakery business in Tashkent. About twelve years ago he started with only one small shop, and he worked in it himself from five in the morning. I used to help him in the school holidays, so I know시제 오류: 올바른 형태는 “knew” how hard the work was. Now he has four shops and about thirty workers, which is a very big success기본적인 어휘, Lexical Resource 점수를 제한함 for a person who have시제 오류: 올바른 형태는 “had” no experience in business. I think he is successful because he is very patient. He did not open new shops quickly, he waited until the first shop was working well. He also listen시제 오류: 올바른 형태는 “listens” to his customers, and when they said the bread was too heavy, he change시제 오류: 올바른 형태는 “changed” the recipe. Another reason is that he teaches his workers carefully and he is kind to them, so they stay with him for many years. When I see him I think that success is not only luck, it is also about hard work every day and being honest to people.

Band 7

I’d like to talk about my uncle Rustam, my mother’s brother, who owns a bakery business in Tashkent. About twelve years ago he began with a single small shop, and he worked in it himself from five every morning. I used to help him during the school holidays, so I knew exactly how demanding it was과거 시제로 맞춰 시제 일치를 지킴. Today he has four shops and around thirty employees, which is quite an achievement for someone who started from scratch자연스러운 관용 표현 with no business background. I think he’s successful because he’s patient: he didn’t open new shops in a rush, he waited until the first one was running smoothly. He also pays attention to his customers, and when several of them said the bread was too heavy, he changed the recipe within a week. Another reason is that he trains his staff carefully and treats them kindly, so they tend to stay with him for years결과를 분명하게 연결해 논리 흐름이 자연스러움. Watching him made me realise that success isn’t just luck; it comes from work hard형태 오류: 올바른 형태는 “working hard” every day and being honest with people, a lesson I’d like to remember in my own career.

Band 8

I’d like to talk about my uncle Rustam, my mother’s brother, who owns a bakery business in Tashkent. About twelve years ago he began with a single small shop, which he ran single-handedly from five every morning정확하고 자연스러운 콜로케이션. I used to help him during school holidays, so I knew exactly how demanding it was. Today he has four shops and around thirty employees, quite an achievement for someone who started from scratch with no business background. I think he’s successful chiefly because he’s patient: he never opened a new shop in a rush, but waited until the previous one was running smoothly. He also pays close attention to customers; when several mentioned that the bread felt heavy, he changed the recipe within a week. Beyond that, he trains his staff carefully and treats them kindly, which is why many of them have stayed for years. Watching him taught me that success isn’t simply a matter of luck부정 비교문에 자연스럽게 쓰인 고정 표현 but the result of working hard every day and dealing honestly with people, and that is exactly the lesson I’d like to carry into my own career.